Shit Just Got Burned

Shit just got an honest criticism.

fo shizzle niguh

alright im not perfect,
i would try again but thats gunna happen when i can really be bothered and come up with another concept thats is somewhat good.
ill admit my skills are pretty bad and I dont need to reminded no more.

I would like more suggestions on how to improve, (i have read what has been said so far)

I would like something like an example. I cant easily just read some critism and produce a spectacular story.

I don't like the main character. He was evil.



Evil people are bad.

no shit dumbass

Quote from pandemedic

no shit dumbass

Get the fuck out of here.



Anyway, cool story.

No U. .