Shit Just Got Burned

Shit just got an honest criticism.

fo shizzle niguh

alright im not perfect,
i would try again but thats gunna happen when i can really be bothered and come up with another concept thats is somewhat good.
ill admit my skills are pretty bad and I dont need to reminded no more.

I would like more suggestions on how to improve, (i have read what has been said so far)

I would like something like an example. I cant easily just read some critism and produce a spectacular story.

I don't like the main character. He was evil.



Evil people are bad.

Quote from pandemedic

no shit dumbass

Get the fuck out of here.



Anyway, cool story.

No U. .