http://www.truploader.com/view/367248

taking down the size, still using inked pencil. I think i like this style. If i get a good rate of approval i think ill stick with it. eh?

The **** is inked pencil?
Use brush. and why would you outline the water with black? >_>

the animation wasn't bad, i don't know what you mean by inked pencil, but the style seemed fine.

C&C:
you shouldn't have the outline on the water, and you should animate splashes and ripples of some sort when the guys go into and move through the water.

Inked pencil... When you use the pencil tool you can use "Straighten," "Curve," or "Ink". Ink doesn't change the shape it just smooths it a bit.

The water, i would attempt to change, but i'm really bad with water animation and especially my particles. Plus it was kinda just an afterthought i added after i finished the backround.

lol.
Laziness is no excuse. I find it funny how slanted basically said everything that I did except he added the ripple part. lawl.

Someone go ahead and break it to him about his movements =]
And the eyes.

Hm? I thought it was pretty smooth, i feel i am improving. Do you not like the motions and the eyes? i know you cant see them too well but the first guy is wearing ozzy shades and the second guy has a helmet, brown hair, and yellow eyes. normally i'd make they eyes glowy but.. whatever

The physics were eh...
When the first guy jumps on the rock, there is barely any impact whatsoever. He should kind of flinch a little bit.

Well you are improving, we just want to help you to your full potential by critising your animation, so you know where to do better next time.

I'd say use the brush, the pencil tool is, not rated highly amongst the best.

The run was quite good actually, some of the poses were wierd, such as when he grabbed onto the ledge, and when he was floating. What I did like a lot was the muzzle effect.

KEEP IT UP!

Thanks KD. i got the muzzle flash from some tutorial somewhere.
I'm terrible with brush. i animated for around a year with it and that entire period is all wasted because i didn't put out anything decent using brush. Ill try and work my way to lines, but those confuse me. I'll see if i can just use pencil as a line. Because pencil is really just a line but freehand.

Thanks for cc.

Awesome! Keep up the good work!

First off, I really hate animations with sticks in it with "cool" hair. It's not moving at all, so it just looks like some ****ed up manga stick with glue in the hair.
Also, outlined water, the hell?
Animation was ok, too short to actually comment on.

You can't use a gun under water...

You can if you animate it so.

You can now.

Tidus, im not changing the hair. its my thing.