Hey guys,

I made a second machinima, related to my last one. This one is entitled Case 2599, and is about a investigation squad that, as you probably guessed, investigates intense and strange seismic activity.

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=foh-kbYPCcI&feature=channel
Case 2599

If you missed my other one, you can see it below.

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=V5eFmhWC2U8
Case 1057

Comment, rate, do you shit. I would love constructive criticism. Thanks!

Just some no critism thanks...

hey, how come you didn't post this at machinima.com
i'm sure those guys over there would appreciate it a lot more than us

its great bro thanks for the thread

Go to machinima.com though

What happened to the other 1542 cases?

Rofl...the cases are based on the ID number of the officer assigned.

Voice acting was really weak. "Something's coming up the hill. Should we engage?" and "ATTACKING" were almost laughable. Just try to put some emotion into it. Machinima is usually weak because of the voice acting. The characters stand still and have no expression. The audience NEEDS to hear that emotion.

The voice acting will get better with practice, though. It looks like you've got some other film skills, which made the movie decent.

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Voice acting was really weak. "Something's coming up the hill. Should we engage?" and "ATTACKING" were almost laughable. Just try to put some emotion into it. Machinima is usually weak because of the voice acting. The characters stand still and have no expression. The audience NEEDS to hear that emotion.

The voice acting will get better with practice, though. It looks like you've got some other film skills, which made the movie decent.

Thanks for the constructive criticism. Part of the problem is that I'm doing all the voice acting as my brother who does these films with me is to lazy to do then with me. Is there any techniques you would suggest for improving emotion in the voices?

For a different thing, Im not sure if this is in the first or second video, but when you use the unstable camera that swings around and takes a while to lock onto its target, I would stick to using that to when you're following fast moving objects. When you do it on still objects it only gives you the impression that the cameraman's just extremely drunk.
Also, the birds-eye-view scene that had the tank and those other things shooting, where the camera flew overtop of the battle, that should be saved for more intense battles, rather than three people slowly shooting things at one guy.
The video's not that bad, though.

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For a different thing, Im not sure if this is in the first or second video, but when you use the unstable camera that swings around and takes a while to lock onto its target, I would stick to using that to when you're following fast moving objects. When you do it on still objects it only gives you the impression that the cameraman's just extremely drunk.
Also, the birds-eye-view scene that had the tank and those other things shooting, where the camera flew overtop of the battle, that should be saved for more intense battles, rather than three people slowly shooting things at one guy.
The video's not that bad, though.

Thanks, I was thinking the same thing when i watched it AFTER posting on youtube. Thanks for all the help guys. This really helps me as a movie maker. Anymore feedback?