http://soundcloud.com/sonoya/unnamed-clean <----- deleted

http://soundcloud.com/sonoya/unnamed-with-weird-vocaloid <----- updated

http://soundcloud.com/sonoya/unnamed <----- Update 2


Opinions? Lyric ideas? Advice? thanks :)

My opinions: melody jingle is weird. clap snare thing is too strong.

Edit: you know what.... hold on, I'm going to remove that retarded melody thing so it's easier to hear.

I REMEMBER YOU.
YOU WANTED TO BATTLE MY NOOBY ASS.

I like the track, the one thing that stood out is that little "vvtf" (I'm so descriptive) sound that happened like every five seconds during most of the song. It was a little loud, it didn't really blend well with the rest of the song.
I can't really think of anything to add since I'm not exactly musically knowledgeable, though.

Quote from Shensurei

I REMEMBER YOU.
YOU WANTED TO BATTLE MY NOOBY ASS.

I like the track, the one thing that stood out is that little "vvtf" (I'm so descriptive) sound that happened like every five during most of the song. It was a little loud, it didn't really blend well with the rest of the song.

yeah, this
the song itself seems pretty solid though man
keep up the good work

I enjoyed it's calming simplicity
Nice work!

vvtf? XD Lol, so it was like the whole song that was happening? tell me where it starts and stops and stuff. Or wait... Was it that reverse-y thing like you're sucking air in really quite?


Also thank you guys. :) I've been working on this abandoned song for quite a while now. This one is hard for some reason. It's like i can't find the right octave and scale.

What program did you use for this?

Fl Studio. :U

I think it was nice, but the 'snare roll' at the start of what ever that was could have gone longer, instead of suddenly stopping.
its cool to have you back on the forums, start animating again~

Lol, thank you R.D. And it feels great to be back. :)

I'll post an updated version of this later. so what should i do about that snare roll thing then?

Oh and i removed the vvtf from what you said Shensurei . I redid the bass line. And added vocaloid seizure sounds just to see if it'll give me an idea how the maybe lyrics melodic part would sound.

Edit: and here it is, updated with that annoying gibberish along with it. Just ask me and i'll upload one with out the headache inducer.
http://soundcloud.com/sonoya/unnamed-with-weird-vocaloid

I'm just gonna type as I listen. Here I go:
The beginning sounds nice and chill. I like the drums. A lot of the vocal notes sounded off key.
(Hey I also see you're following Renzu. I heard his Boyz in the hood remix a while back and I couldn't stop rolling xD.
But back on topic.) The bassline fit in well and didn't conflict with the drums. Although it is unfinished for now it sounds really good. I like your other songs too. Cheers :]

Wow, why thank you. ^-^ And yeah the vocals are not to stay. i just wanted it there to cover that sound of emptiness when it doesn't have that. And that sig of yours. Is that made by you? I really like that. I like it alot. Mind giving me the mp3 to that as a song? It sounds so nice.

I made most of it xD . I mashed up samples from Pogo- Uplar and added my own instruments etc. Download link here. Glad you like it :]

The snare that comes in at like 0:30 or what really is a pain, destroys the vibe of the song. The stutters are a pretty good idea in general, but they shouldn't be the focus of the song for so long.
I like the synth choices you made for most of it though, the chords are nice, too. Just when the bass comes in, the entire feel of the song changes so suddenly. Don't know if you intended that, but I can't really say I like it.
Listening on, the stutters are starting to annoy. I'm waiting for like a synth solo or something that sticks out a little more. Ooooo nice filters at 3:00. That was awesome.
But now it stopped being awesome because it doesn't end... and now it did end and I didn't like it. Would be worth a shot to not get it out of the filter all the way and put a short break of some sort, then jumping from filtered back to normal, if you get what I mean. Ramp it up to like 70%, then make a quick and more powerful jump to 100%.

Sounds kinda negative the way I put it, but I found this pretty neat. The chords are cool, I just think you wanted a little too much with the stutters and shit. I'd try and change the percussives up all the way and put this to a more chilled-out mood in general.

Not at all! I except all kinds of comments! And no worries for me at least. XD I can still go by the fact i'm still far from finished with this song at least.

Is it the snare roll or just the clap/snare thing after that, like the change in sound?

Trying to make those stutters, hihat's i think if that's what you're talking about, is one of the hardest things to make in my opinion, which is why they sound so... obvious. And finding and mastering all samples is also hard for me.Any idea on how to fix the bassline(like how should it go)? This song is actually pretty hard to work with compared to my other ones having to do with this. The other problems that you pointed out are things i've actually set aside to fix later. Right now i'm just trying to correct the faults in the things i've already locked in on. I don't know how to say it. lol

Should i maybe lower the volume of the stutters? Or make some places in the song where it's a simpler or no stutter?

And yeah, "chilled-out mood in general" that's what i've been trying to get. How would the kick be then? I still do have problems with it.

Also thank you alot for your input. You post is my favorite since it seems like you really get how music works. Sorry if i sound like a fag here, it's just get really nervous when i find a good post. I hope when i make major fixes, you comment again.