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Luther "Rochedan" Wright (Rochedan) vs Zeus (Kingkickass2013) 3rd time

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Mar 27, 2013 9:41 PM #928292
Turns out he sent his story to me and I just completely forgot about it while making my own story.

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d all of stickpage city are taking a massive toll from a huge heat wave. All of the people living in the city are lucky due to all of them owning different cooling technologies such as fans and thermostats, however the villagers and people who live in the kingdom are not as lucky.

"Why hast the lord cast this massive fire cloud upon my people." Zeus says while sitting on his throne, Zeus decides its time to see how serious the situation is in his village and kingdom, he walks through the hallways of his kingdom and sees even the royal guards having a hard time standing up in this heat, Zeus walked towards a door that led up the stairs to the highest tower in the kingdom, every other step a lit torch lies on the wall to keep the stairway illuminated, the king walked up all the stairs and opened the door to enter the top of the tower, he was frightened by the sight. The villagers are sitting all around the village, some are dead on the ground, while the others are being scorched in the hot sun, they were boiling in their own sweat as they sat in the village, the water in the well had completely dried out and the only thing left inside the well was dried dirt and rocks. The king knew he must do something, but sadly he can't think of anything he could do for them.

"ROYAL ADVISERS, what can I do to save my people, they are all dying in this giant fire wave." Zeus shouted towards his advisers, "perhaps sire you and nine footmen should go to the large forest and collect water from its rivers, the desert may be a horrible place to go, but passed it the large forest has many rivers based on your journey there last time." the old adviser said, the king looked at the old adviser with a frown, but then knew he must do it for the sake of his villagers.

Zeus ran down the stairs from the tower and walked back through the hallways of his kingdom, after he found the front door exit that led to the village, he walked through the doors, his eyes readjusted to the blinding light outside. He walked through the village looking around at all the villagers, they were starving, thirsty, and dying from the heat. "M-my lord I plead to you, save us all from this hell." One of the villagers sitting down by the well said as he was pulling up the strength to hold up his arm towards Zeus. "Don't worry, I'm going back to the large forest's rivers to bring water back here." Zeus told the dying villager.

The king ran towards the footmen barracks, over 200 soldier of both genders were baking in the heat, their were a couple soldiers who were holding and playing musical instruments like guitars and flutes, but it didn't help raise anybodies spirits, the king collected 9 footmen and ordered them to come with him, they moved swiftly out of the front gate of the new wooden wall built around the village, they couldn't believe their eyes. The once lush grasslands that surrounded their homeland was now a barren dirt field with nothing more than small patches of dark yellow grass left, the trees looked somewhat intact though the leaves on the trees had fallen off the trees, all the birds either lay dead on the ground or are staying inside what was once a perfect tree full of life.

"Come now, we must move forth, the village depends on us." Zeus said while walking in the barren wasteland. "YES MY LORD." the nine footmen said at the same time.

After wandering through what used to be lush grasslands, they finally reached the wall, the king and the men opened the gate and walked into the massive desert, the same place Iodnik died in while fighting the massive scorpion.


CURIOSITY KILLED THE KING

"Is their anything we should fear while wandering through this desert?" one of the footmen said. "No, on my last journey here only a couple sand thieves attacked us, we killed them with one casualty and after we fought them we saw nothing else but sand." Zeus replied towards the footman,

While wandering through the seemingly endless desert, something caught Zeus's eye, a large grey dot in the distance. "SOLDIERS, continue on to the rivers of the forest, I need to see this." Zeus told the soldiers, the footmen nodded and continued on the path, while Zeus strayed towards the grey building.

Zeus was getting close to the building and more objects appeared on it. Large, thick, metallic doors sit at the front entrance, nearby the roof of the building are slits in which are possibly used for shooting from, Zeus got a bit closer and noticed at least thirty red lines began aiming at his head.

A red dart shot from the top of the building and Zeus didn't react in time, it landed directly on Zeus's forehead, injecting his head with something, he was paralyzed, Zeus could see everything happening but can't do anything about it.

Three people walked towards Zeus's paralyzed body, one person in a lab coat, one wearing a black suit with a red tie and his hands are gripping onto an assault rifle, and the last one having a white symbol on his head. "Quickly take him inside, we shall begin project alpha mark nine, AND KNOCK HIM OUT, WE CAN'T AFFORD TO FAIL ON THIS MISSION." the man in a lab coat said. The man with the white mark walked closer and whispered something in Zeus's ear "Don't worry, I'm gonna get you out of the base and fix whatever they do to you, you are not gonna suffer the same way I did.", the words were only loud enough for Zeus to hear, the other men couldn't hear what he told the king.

After saying so the man punched Zeus once in the face, it didn't knock Zeus out so the man just repeatedly punched Zeus in the face, blood was splattering all over the sand and Zeus's face was completely broken up and swollen, Zeus was knocked out after ten minutes of the man beating him up.


LAB EXPERIMENT

Zeus woke up in a boxy room with barely any light "Where in gods name am I?" Zeus said as he looked around, Zeus then punched the wall with his fist, he noticed the wall was made of metal and then noticed that his armor was gone along with his weaponry and crown, he not only made his fist bleed but he was in an orange convict jumpsuit.

After a while, Zeus lost track of how long he was in this dark room and was starting to grow a small brown beard, the room was quite small and the only thing he could sleep on was horrible urine stained straws set up in the form of a bed.

But then a light flashed before Zeus's eyes, it was extremely bright and Zeus couldn't look at it for a while, but his eyes readjusted to the shining light, it was a large light bulb at the top of his head in the "prison".

Then a sound was heard, a monotone voice spoke from behind a black glass window and said these words "If you want all the people in your village to live then you will serve us.", Zeus couldn't believe his ears, just before Zeus could speak the man speaking in the monotone voice was being beaten up, Zeus knew this because he heard the man being bashed up all against the walls behind the glass window.

A few minutes after a man wearing a red and black voodoo mask wielding two bloody batons came in through the prison's ceiling. "COME ON WE DON'T HAVE MUCH TIME!" the man said as he grabbed Zeus's arm and pulled him through the giant hole in the ceiling.

They were traveling through the air ducts of the building, they were cramped and dusty, they crawled slowly for the air ducts were made of metal and people will be able to hear them if they weren't careful, every once and a while they can hear the screams of fear from other people along with shouts of anger from soldiers.

"They mutated you and now you have the ability to make fire appear out of nowhere, I've been saving a lot of people who end up forced into the RHG corporation, the men still don't know who I am." the masked man said as he pulled off his mask to reveal his face and the white symbol upon his head. "My name is Luther wright, and your name for now is project alpha nine, I can get you your armor and weaponry back, they only got halfway through the mutations so you should end up losing the fire powers by the end of the day."

"So let me guess, you are project alpha two? and another guess, the RHG corporation has been taking people inside their building and are threatening the people to work for them?" Zeus said a bit of anger. "Not exactly, see they only take in the people who trespass nearby the building, they can't just walk up to people and kidnap them, if they did that then people in stickpage city would get suspicious of their citizens suddenly disappearing and send an army this way. But you did get the part about them threatening us right. And I'm the original project alpha, I am the most simple mutation here, if you saw project charlie ten you would shit yourself on how frightening and powerful it is." Luther told Zeus.

"Ah we are here." said Luther, Zeus and Luther finally made it to the item room, there sat all of Zeus's armor and his precious crown.

"Well we best hope the guards are on break, if not this is gonna be a batons and fire vs guns fight, and I sure as hell know your not knowledgeable about your new fire abilities." Luther said with a worried look on his face.


FREEDOM OF THE KING

Luther looked in through the wall air duct and saw four guards sitting on wooden chairs with submachine guns by their sides while having themselves a nice cup of coffee, but right behind them sat all of Zeus's armor and weapons.

"You may wanna sit this one out, your still completely pathetic even with your new fire powers, plus you have no armor so your even more pathetic." Luther said with a smile. Zeus just looked at him with complete and utter hatred, but that hatred quickly changed.

Luther slowly opened the vent so non of the guards could hear him, he then held on to the vent gate so it wouldn't fall down and make a huge crashing noise. Luther then leaped down to the tiled floor but made not a single noise due to the very light equipment he had on, the guards became weary as if they felt they were being watched, then looked over at the vents and saw the masked man. They immediately went for their submachine guns but Luther had already began running towards them, he leaped up into the air and used the baton to break the skull of the first guard.

The rest managed to pick up their submachine guns in time, but Luther shot a burst of air with his fist towards the second guards head, knocking him completely out.

The two other guards still not completely unconscious or dead began firing at Luther, Zeus noticed something strange while watching the fight, he noticed that Luther was getting shot and all bullets were hitting him, but he wasn't going down.

One of the guards hit Luther in head with the back of the submachine gun, sending him down to the tiled floor, small cracks were made on the tiles when he hit the ground. Zeus quickly took action and tested his new temporary fire abilities, he ended up charring the inside of the third guards head and bursting the fourth guard into flames, the fourth guard wailed as he ran all over the place burning most of the weapon boxes, the third guard was killed instantly due to extreme heat hitting the brain.

Zeus jumped down and picked Luther up, Luther was completely shocked on how powerful Zeus's mutation was. "Well, who's pathetic now, anyway one of these boxes contain my beautiful crown." Zeus said with a smile. "I seriously hope you lose those powers soon, those abilities can make somebody go mad with power."

Luther and the king went to the now charred box and picked up all of Zeus's armor, Zeus equipped all of the armor just above the convict jumpsuit, then placed his precious crown upon his head, after doing so his blade began having its turquoise glowing runes, his armor began having a nice shine, and his crowns gem began glowing red once again. "Time to head home, and kill any soldiers who dare attempt to take down my village." Zeus angrily said.


A VILLAGE PROBLEM

Zeus had all his armor on and his weaponry, but an alarm was ringing due to them breaking into the items room, they quickly dashed out the room but their were already a bunch of soldiers armed with assault rifles heading their way, so they went back into the item room and locked the door, then jumped back into the air ducts and closed back the vent so they wouldn't find out how they got into the item room.

They were back in the air ducts, only this time Zeus's armor was working against them, extremely heavy metal isn't exactly the most quiet thing to be sneaking in.

They made their way through the air ducts completely undetected and reached the top of the building, there they saw a massive army from the building heading towards Zeus's land. "I hope the footmen made it to the village with the massive water barrel."

Zeus and Luther looked around and Luther saw something that may help take down these soldiers.


HELI DESTRUCTION

A helicopter pad, with an excellent battle ready helicopter, armed with missiles and a large front minigun, along with side manually controllable miniguns.

Zeus had not a clue what the hell he was looking at, but Luther on the other hand had sparkles in his eyes as he basks in the glory of this death machine. "Oh I'm gonna love killing a couple things with this." Luther said with sign of great happiness, Zeus is just looking at Luther as if he had some really bad mental problem.

Luther yanked Zeus's arm and was running towards the helicopter, oddly he managed to pull Zeus inside the helicopter even with his heavy armor on.

"YOU ARM THE SIDE MINIGUNS WHILE I TAKE CONTROL OF THE HELICOPTER, MISSILES, AND FRONT MINIGUN." Luther shouted towards Zeus as he started up the helicopter. "Um, how doth this thing wor." Zeus said as he accidentally fired a shot at the roof of the base, the bullet caused massive damage and had set some parts of the area aflame. "Hmm appears we have incendiary ammo, lucky us we will be taking down the squadron heading towards your village."

The helicopter began flight, but the roar of the helicopter could be heard all throughout the base. Soldiers began piling up to the roof and shooting at the helicopter, Zeus's learned how to use the minigun and began firing in the general direction of the soldiers, he missed most shots and was tempted to jump out of the helicopter and just slash all the heads off those soldiers.

They made it away from the base and began heading towards the squadron, the helicopter was going faster than them so they got to the soldiers quickly.

Zeus fired at the soldiers, he missed a lot of shots, but thanks to the fact that its a rapid fire explosive weapon, he managed to do some damage. Blood, fires, and explosions were sent all throughout the area, soldiers were set aflame as the incendiary bullets hit nearby them, while the soldiers who had been directly hit were blown up completely.

The missiles did quick work to the vehicles driven, the explosions from the vehicles killing even more soldiers.

Luther was laughing as the front minigun let down a spray of bullets and as he watched all the soldiers blow up into nothing but a bloody mess, Zeus was starting to fear Luther more than he should.


THE VILLAGE IS SAFE

Luther drove the helicopter towards Zeus's village and they both found the nine footmen were successful on their mission, the villagers were extremely happy now that the fresh cold water from the rivers of the forest is now at their village, however they were very displeased on Zeus leaving the footmen due to curiosity.

"Sire, why did you leave your footmen, if they hadn't of survived then we may have died." one of the villagers said. "There was a massive building I found, it had been secretly taking people who trespass nearby it, I plan taking an army their someday, but not today." Zeus replied.

"Well now that you got your armor and such I guess I will be heading back to my base." Luther said. "WAIT, I want to fight you, I want to prove who's superior." Zeus said as he unsheaved his sword towards Luther. "Very well then, BUT I WILL SHOW NO MERCY." Luther said as if he attempted to intimidate Zeus.

"First we rest, so I can lose the fire powers and you can get back your strength, then by the morrow we will do battle
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Mar 27, 2013 9:42 PM #928294
Alright this is a little embarrassing. Third time charm: it worked!
Now would you kindly put my story in a spoiler, some people have trouble reading from google documents.

That's all, I'm going to sleep now, but first I am going to tell what I think of your story!


+ I think your story is well written, it shows humor and actually made me laugh at some parts.
+ I can see you actually read some of my 'story-line' entries, I really appreciate this.

+/- Luther's skin isn't actually that "indestructible", enchanted swords would pierce his skin. (something you could not have known).
+/- Luther does not have A WHITE SYMBOL, on his forehead, since this is an important thing about Luther's appearance, this annoyed me a little.

- You frequently make the same errors, like switching : Your --> You're, and Their --> There. (Ironically I make the same errors)
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Mar 27, 2013 9:43 PM #928299
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Alright this is a little embarrassing.


What do you mean? He's finally got it up properly.
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Mar 27, 2013 9:44 PM #928301
It was also embarrassing that I can't delete the other mistakes made today. So the failures stay their permanently.

Also, here's a question, why did my weaponry burn your character, your characters not made from darkness or evils.

(Luzoto, he either means its embarrassing that I had to do this so many times, or that he over raged on what I would probably call a bunch of mistakes)

Next post down: here's my current emotion when you said that, http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=a1Y73sPHKxw

I'm trying to cut back completely on spam after my last ban.
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Mar 27, 2013 9:46 PM #928304
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It was also embarrassing that I can't delete the other mistakes made today. So the failures stay their permanently.


I just moved the other two to the trash can, to unclutter the mess.

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Also, here's a question, why did my weaponry burn your character, your characters not made from darkness or evils.


Either it was a mistake and he thought your sword burned everyone, or Luther has a secret *dun dun DUUUUN*
Probably the former though.
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Mar 27, 2013 9:52 PM #928309
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I just moved the other two to the trash can, to unclutter the mess.



Either it was a mistake and he thought your sword burned everyone, or Luther has a secret *dun dun DUUUUN*
Probably the former though.


Maybe the latter, Luther still doesn't know himself and is still developing his personality.
(trust me I read through Zeus's page with great detail)
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Mar 27, 2013 10:02 PM #928315
Anyway Rochedan, here's what I think of your story.

Your story is well written, and the action battle scenes are splendid in everything, I could imagine the whole thing easily without asking myself "WAIT, does this mean that or does it mean this?"

Everything is great, except for three things.

The people at Atauromin moved away from that land, unless your speaking in the terms of you going to that land BEFORE the giant creature attacked it.

The blades of the footmen, royal guards, and Zeus are enchanted to burn EVIL and creatures made from DARKNESS, I don't know about you but your character seems to be good at heart and is just forced to kill to get back his mother. Unless the stuff that mutated him was made from the essence of darkness.

IMAGINATION LAND, when I finished up your story the only thing I could think of is imagination land from south park, you making my character and his people completely part of your characters imagination seems kinda well. *Okay meme*
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Mar 27, 2013 10:06 PM #928322
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IMAGINATION LAND, when I finished up your story the only thing I could think of is imagination land from south park, you making my character and his people completely part of your characters imagination seems kinda well. *Okay meme*


Well, maybe the Operator just wanted to test my electric ability, maybe he picked me up after the fight, and told me to go in rest again? Erasing parts of my memorie?
What you are implying is something I'd never do, I just like to leave some space open to make things more interesting :P

PS: about the "dark essence of the stuff that mutated him", yeah, you are getting close. very, very, close.
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Mar 27, 2013 10:08 PM #928327
Alright, by the way, how did I do for you characters personality and what he could be doing (NOTE, who's to say there is only one project in that building)
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Mar 27, 2013 10:16 PM #928334
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Alright, by the way, how did I do for you characters personality and what he could be doing (NOTE, who's to say there is only one project in that building)


We will continue this in PM's from now on.
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Mar 27, 2013 11:08 PM #928376
Kingkickass - I've already given CnC for you, just check first locked thread, haha

Rochedan - i'm on my phone at the moment, but when I get a chance, I'll give some help
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Mar 28, 2013 9:06 AM #928715
Hey Kingkickass, SOME PEOPLE CANT OPEN GOOGLE DOCS, make it as a spoiler like I asked you five-hundred times.
It gets annoying when people just ignore you, at least have the decency to say `no´ and give me a reason...

Edit: I posted the battle at my own story-line thread, you can see the link "his story" in my signature. the battle will be the last entry. (not the final)
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Mar 29, 2013 2:38 AM #929461
Alright, but I remember you saying specifically that you wanted your story inside google docs, DO NOT put it in a spoiler, and I listened.

But I shall make the changes now.
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Mar 29, 2013 4:04 PM #929849
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Alright, but I remember you saying specifically that you wanted your story inside google docs, DO NOT put it in a spoiler, and I listened.


Frankly I did not, you simply misread what I told you. But hey, things are fine now.
But I'm kind of disappointed at the amount of votes we got, I mean, look at Frost vs. Lethal, they have like 14 votes already X_X
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Mar 29, 2013 4:18 PM #929863
I cant find the time to read this...But I promise, I will vote on you two.
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