Claud, feel free to battle!!!!
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View Profile Claud
Abilities
Able to control sand with his body, also can turn into sand,Claud can turn sand into an item or structure and also is able to make this item or sturcture solid like rock
Weakness
his weakness is water making him more and more slower
Story
Claud was an orphan when he ran away, his parents died in an accident while in a clan battle.
He found out that he could control sand while he was walking around the desert. He raised his hand and sand came up at the same time.
He survived off of the skills that where already in his head, food and shelter. While he was walking around town in his dirty rags, he saw a poster.
"wRHG? I wonder what this is"
Claud took the poster off the bulletin board and took it to his shed. He read and read about all the battles and he decided, " I'm going to join the wRHG! Mom, Dad just watch me win FOR YOU!!!" He pointed to the heavens, and looked up.
He signed up to the wRHG's and is training and training for them.
Demo
Claud walks straight towards his enemy as the sounds of his footsteps fill the room, his enemy runs towards hi mand pushes Claud's head down. Claud kicks him off and continuously punches him left and right. blood splatters onto the ground and his enemy catches one of Claud's fists. Claud gets pushed to the floor and pinned.
Is this the end?
"NO!"
Claud turns red with fury and sand covers Claud's fist and BAM! Claud punched his enemy waiting til' his enemy gets back up. He covers his whole body with sand, he has armor 1/1 out of 0/1 armor. His enemy(let's just call him bob cause enemy sounds weird) runs towards him and kneels him in the face. Claud's facial sand armor falls off and he gets pushed aback and kicked in the gut. Claud runs towards Bob and pushes him into the sand then wraps him with sand, and CRUSHES HIM. Another opponent runs towards Claud, he is very tired from the first opponent. Claud walks towards him and this time, he is desperate to use his sand glove, he starts to run and he squirts sand out of his mouth! He reaches for the trigger on his glove and pulls, sand forms into a rock and Claud throws that rock which turns into sand as it hits his opponent. Claud kicks his/her side and punches it(can't think of anything to name it) down. He continuously punches it and pulls it towards the wall and BAM! He threw the body at the wall. He pulls of his sand glove and rests. All of a sudden something hits the air out of his body. It was his enemy, BlackDar, BlackDar was Claud's good friend(not another wRHG btw). Claud pushed Black with all his might all his might and forced sand to stick him to the wall and harden. Claud let's go and leaves Black there, even to this day you can still see him there. Claud leaves and waits for someone to attack. Then Claud punches the opponent and pins him down. He pushes the opponent towards the ground until there's a print of the opponent's body. Claud throws the opponent at the wall. He runs towards him and punches him right in the middle of the heart. The opponent spits a little blood then he tries to break free, but Claud's force was too strong. Sand started to go up the opponent's neck and his strength slowly faded and faded until he finally collapsed. Claud started to walk towards the desert with his hands and face splattered with blood. Just when Claud stepped on the sand. He collapsed.
Personality and Appearance
Claud is a teenage boy, very short, he is nice and funny, and he gets angry sometimes and uses his sand unlikely. He has brown hair and has 2 sand gloves, they are both dark brown. He isn't athletic so when he runs he normally takes long steps, so his opponent mostly has and advantage. He is mean when it comes to meeting up with BlackDar(read demo). He has tan colored markings all over his arms, he doesn't know what they are but they glow when ever he moves around the sand.
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Available pluto_kun2Posts: 83
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View Profile This character reminds me of Crocodile (apparently watched too much anime)
An interesting gladiator... but you'll need to spice things up;
First, describe your character more - right now, all I can see is that Claud is an orphaned teenage boy with sand abilities, but that is it.
It feels like you just copy&pasted the format and put minimum effort in your character - no offense; this is why I avoid CnC-ing. I get mean.
How did he get his abilities? What is his personality? What does he really look like?
It is good to see that you have a profile picture up there, but what I'd like to see is some words.
As for the story, be more creative. Add more things to it. Have fun tweaking with details.
Finally, the demo - it is 156 words. wRHG demo minimum is 300 words :3
Anything else about his ability that you want to show us?
Show me more of this character, please.
I would love to see Claud fight, but first you need to be fully prepared to present him in front of other writers.
Chamel2Posts: 1,133
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View Profile It's okay to be mean if you help people get better Pluto, haha.
Anyway, basically what Pluto said. You also need to a personality and appearance section before Luzo sees >_> HURRY MAN HURRY!
THEFORCE2Posts: 1,391
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View Profile This character reminds me of Crocodile (apparently watched too much anime)
An interesting gladiator... but you'll need to spice things up;
First, describe your character more - right now, all I can see is that Claud is an orphaned teenage boy with sand abilities, but that is it.
It feels like you just copy&pasted the format and put minimum effort in your character - no offense; this is why I avoid CnC-ing. I get mean.
How did he get his abilities? What is his personality? What does he really look like?
It is good to see that you have a profile picture up there, but what I'd like to see is some words.
As for the story, be more creative. Add more things to it. Have fun tweaking with details.
Finally, the demo - it is 156 words. wRHG demo minimum is 300 words :3
Anything else about his ability that you want to show us?
Show me more of this character, please.
I would love to see Claud fight, but first you need to be fully prepared to present him in front of other writers.
What he/she said^
LuzotoPosts: 1,100
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View Profile wRHG unlocked
Have fun sanding people to death :3
THEFORCE2Posts: 1,391
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View Profile wRHG unlocked
Have fun sanding people to death :3
Does the "wRHG unlocked" mean anything? Like if you don't post that in my thread then I'm not allowed to battle someone?
Crank2Posts: 1,849
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View Profile It means that he locked it before for some reason, which I believe was in part about the demo.
Upon the correction for the profile, instead of posting again, he simply edited his post. It would be odd if it still said "wRHG locked" when it wasn't. Not to mention be a little confusing.
If you see a wRHG thread that doesn't say 'wRHG unlocked' it doesn't mean it can't be used, it just means it never had that problem.
THEFORCE2Posts: 1,391
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View Profile It means that he locked it before for some reason, which I believe was in part about the demo.
Upon the correction for the profile, instead of posting again, he simply edited his post. It would be odd if it still said "wRHG locked" when it wasn't. Not to mention be a little confusing.
If you see a wRHG thread that doesn't say 'wRHG unlocked' it doesn't mean it can't be used, it just means it never had that problem.
OK. Thanks! :D
Claud1323Posts: 182
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View Profile did a mod change the name of this thread? I don't remember adding "The Robot" to the name
pluto_kun2Posts: 83
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View Profile Hewitt nicknamed almost every active characters... in your case, it became "The Robot".
I guess you can feel free to change the title if you wish.
kingkickass2013Posts: 1,839
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View Profile No actually Hewitt made it so we can't change the title or delete the pages, either that or he is currently punishing me for no reason which I find rather despicable since I have a couple pages I need to delete and fix.
Serenity2Posts: 57
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View Profile Yes you can. I also changed it.
Claud1323Posts: 182
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View Profile Would anyone like to battle? I would be pleased to battle since it is summertime, pls pm me for a wRHG battle it would be nice to battle someone.