actually it was "children's story theme"

I really hope somehow I landslide to round 2 so I can prove myself and take every minute of time I can have on it.

In my opnion, Nikx, BirtDog and Codincx are guarenteed to win. (Just READ their works.)

As for 4th place, Boomer and me are fighting for it, with Shadow overhead (with a not-so-small gap) unless...multiple votes cause a sudden landslide for another person.

@Nikx: Um...But then me and Boomer wouldn't stand a chance?

Hmmmm I actually think Shadow Kirby's (while unfinished) was one of those that deserves to be up there in the rankings. You guys forget that this is a "children's story" theme and that his also brings the most classic of children's story formats. Rhyme and creative telling of a story. Had he continued I feel that he would have made significant progress and easily made one of the top rankings in my own opinion.

Story telling isn't a consistent thing. It's like an ever changing flow of a river bound to the ground and tied to the sky at the same time.

Okay, CnC time!

1. Birtdog: That...*tears up* That was beautiful. Magnificent. You make me scared to have a wRHG battle with you because I'm 95% sure I'd lose. You were probably the only one that really really captured the theme of the story. You fulfilled your ante and didn't give one, but two morals. I'm so jealous of you man. You deserve to be on top. (Soft tacos and Catbug :D)

2. Nikx232: Another magnificent piece! You seemed to capture the childrens theme as well, albeit not as well as birt, but you two are quite possibly the only two that did that right. Your moral was also spot on, and you managed to have a shorter piece packed with awesomeness. Although, your ante is debatable since, as Birt said, you didn't necessarily justify it. That is probably the only thing that brought you down to 2nd, otherwise I would have quite the hard time choosing between you and birt.

3. Boomerang (AKA Me): Okay, let's start with my flaws. My descriptions were most definitely not vivid enough. In fact, my story was barely children themed at all! My moral was only shown in the first and last sentence, which I should have just changed to, and I quote

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Nice guys don't finish last

And I also was not happy about my ante, TOO MANY COLOR DESCRIPTIONS. But, in my defense, I wanted to be sure at least three of them were rightly described, although I Do think I still fulfilled it
Okay, time to stop beating myself up. Mario Kart; Classic game, perfect thing to use as a match up. I still showed Titus and Pencillum's attitudes, the cockiness and such. I also think the 2 out of 3 was at least slightly clever (Though I will note to myself to not do multiple dimensions anymore since I am clearly bad at it). I also did try to indent my paragraphs and format well but my phone WOULD NOT LET ME. AAAAAAAH. I even added Pencillum's pencil ability into it. Plus, I used the long story to try to add a large amount of description and racing and such, but sadly to no avail.
All in all, I think if I made it to round 2, I would do better. No, not even think, I know. This is my first serious entry and now I shall learn from it. I think I had fair writing, and add some bias to my own work and there's my ranking.

4. Merich1: (This is where voting began to get sketchy for me. Other than Birt and Nikx, were all pretty much the same (except the last 2-3 rankings) I know I know, it sounds odd. But I honest to goodness really liked Merich's piece. From the start. Ante was fulfilled well and I liked the addition to Hewwy talking to Luna as well as the way the fourth wall was broken. Albeit the camera pans made things confusing and the other story was a bit not needed, but I still liked it a lot.

5. GamerXD8 I did like Gamer's work. I had read it in it's early stages, and I really liked the three trials. I liked the moral at the end, and hey, you fulfilled your ante, that's a plus. Though, Nikx did make a good point with the boss battle. I also think, like mine, it was long for no good reason. But it was still very fair writing and *pats back* You and I are goin' somewhere, kid.

6. Codincx: You were a close tie with Gamer. Mainly because yours were sort of the same. Boss battle, trials, teamwork. I liked your princess part of the story, and just how storybook-like it was. But I didn't like how your writing was pretty much go to tower, get key, leave. Rinse and repeat, albeit a few better trials which were done in only a few sentences. So for me, mate, you get 6th

7. ShadowKirby: I liked the creativity of your piece. It was something that nobody else came up with, and if it was finished, you would have made me wonder why you lost in the winners bracket in the first place. It's just that, technically nobody won, they just barely started. Add on the fact that at some points it was a bit bumpy and I think that it just should be here. Don't think I ranked it like this only cuz it was unfinished, I just wasn't very fond of it.

8. TyTheGamerGuy: Okay, I like the Minecraft part. and the teamwork at the end. But dude, you didn't even finish your ante. If that diamond sword was your attempt, then I don't think it would be good enough for Hewwy's approval. I also didn't see a moral, plus your story just felt bland.

9. Canis Majoris: I soooo wish I could have seen more from you. I liked the idea, But I can't really rate a paragraph over a 9. I'm sorry.

Thanks for all the positive feedback. It means a lot to feel...appreciated =)

And although there was few negative notes, I loved them equally. It helps more than the positive notes at times. Thank you for those.

@Knightface: love the detail to pride vs. heard, I'll be more careful. Gunna "ain't" a word so I'll spell it however I want lol. Keep being knit(?)-pickey, I enjoy it.

@Codinx: the only "battle" this challenge promoted was a children's story involving the 2 combatants. That didn't mean I had to write a battle, but I had to write a children's story that competed against my opponent's story. I only had to "win" with a story, not win a competition (of any kind) AGAINST my opponent in the story. We battle here (on this site) with stories, the fact we have gladiators doesn't mean we have to write a battle, but most of the challenge we're in involve incorporating a battle; this one didn't. (This is how I understand it at least, but we all see things differently)
Besides, my story was non-cannon so I could actually put Dominic into a children's story (that was the biggest challenge lol)

@Nikx: I knew someone would bring up the ante. Remember how I posted that my final edit had to be done twice because my session wasn't saved? I actually had lines that broke the 4th wall constantly in the original edit, but when I re-editted it I thought it was due in like...20 minutes (iI hadn't seen the post that said due the 25th) so I rushed the edit, left out some 4th wall narrative, and because of that I did in fact lose my consistency in wall breaking. XD

Ah I see, I'm sorry about that. That actually explains a lot about where all of that went. :U

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Ah I see, I'm sorry about that. That actually explains a lot about where all of that went. :U

No need to apologize. Not your fault. But thanks for the kind regards.

1. Birtdog
Can't really say anything bad about this. It was, well, exactly how it should have been written. Far and away the best. It fit the theme and was generally just well written.

2. Nikx232
Only bad thing about yours was that it felt short, and didn't really incorporate your ante very well. Otherwise, well written, fit the theme very nicely.

3. Codincx
Well... don't know what to say. It was... good, I guess. I think that everybody just falls off drastically after Birtdog and Nikx232. I would have loved to see you expand on the secondary story and write almost like two stories in one. I don't know, I just think this could have been top tier with Birt and Nikx and it... just didn't feel right, somehow. I really don't know why I don't like it as much. When I figure that out I'm going to edit this.

4. merich1
First of all, your story sucks. Second of all, you're so arrogant that you decided to give yourself fourth, which you obviously don't deserve.
With that out of the way, your story actually is pretty bad. The Augustine storyline should have been either expanded on or cut. An actual decent ending would have been nice. The actual plot is very, VERY thin, yet the story is so complex that it's hard to follow for children, who ARE THE TARGET AUDIENCE. Instead of fixing your glaring plot holes, you justified them in canon, which I can safely say is because you were too lazy to fix it... which is actually a nice touch, in my humble opinion. Which brings me to my other points.
Your aim, I think, was to create a humorous, whimsical story that would be just generally entertaining for anyone to read. You succeeded... somewhat. It definitely got me to laugh at points, but it was really hard to read because of all the jumps of the stories. It could have been a great story... but it wasn't. However it was better, or at least very close, to some of the others, so I have to place it fourth.

5. GamerXD8
I... liked your story. Really. But again, it just didn't feel right. I'm going to say the same thing as my writeup of Codincx, and I'll edit this when I figure out what I don't like about it.

6. Shadowkirby
I can't deny that your poem idea was original. But it just felt a bit forced. I'll give you props for the originality, but you can't carry a story with differentness. And without the rest of the plot, I don't know where you were trying to go, so I can't really place you any higher than 6th.

7. BoomerangReturns
ERMAHGRD WALLOFTEXT MENOREAD nah, I'm kidding. It was a fun story. But I felt that a children's story shouldn't really be based around... modernness. I mean, give or take twenty years, stuff like Lobo's and BirtDog's stories will still be really good. But nobody will understand Mario Kart. I placed this over Ty because it was written better though.

8. TyTheGamerGuy
Er... yeah.

9. Canis Majoris
I'm sorry, but I can't give one paragraph over anybody else that actually had a story. Props for submitting it anyway though.

Revisions coming! None of this finalized!

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@Knightface: love the detail to pride vs. heard, I'll be more careful. Gunna "ain't" a word so I'll spell it however I want lol. Keep being knit(?)-pickey, I enjoy it.

Sure thing, BirtDog. ^_^

-- Nightlock*
-- Herd*
-- Gonna*
-- Nit picky*/Nitpicky*

There you go.

*sigh* just when i think i may landslide fourth

Well...Better luck next time. To me. :D

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Sure thing, BirtDog. ^_^

-- Nightlock*
-- Herd*
-- Gonna*
-- Nit picky*/Nitpicky*

There you go.

GOT YOU! You forgot about "ain't"! I win. Flurry of Wins. Lol

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GOT YOU! You forgot about "ain't"! I win. Flurry of Wins. Lol

I thought I saw furry. XD

Please note that me and acute will also be ranking these eventually (we won't show our rankings for bias sake). The total will ULTIMATELY be the actual result.