Abilities

Tenebris
ains an ancient spirit of darkness. Its dark, serrated blade is made of meteorite. Small, orb-like essences of shadows hover around it. It has a long, iron cross-shaped hilt with a black gemstone engraved in the center. It has a rounded pommel made of iron as well. Though heavy for other beings, Umbra and his blade seem to move as one, as if Tenebris was part of his body. When it is summoned, shadow-like roots extend from its hilt and wrap around the wielder’s arms. [/spoiler]

Ignis Fatuus
ebris all gather together and cloak Umbra, turning him into a shadow orb which can morph into any form of shadow. At this state, Umbra cannot take any damage from swords, bullets, and the like. Fire and electricity are the only things that can hurt him at this state. Everything just passes through him. He becomes faster than the average man. This form, though, takes a huge toll on Umbra’s body. It can only be used for a total of thirty seconds per battle. He also can’t inflict any damage while in this form. He can, and likes to, switch in and out of this form, using it in short bursts to reposition himself before turning back into human form.
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Aevitas
nnot be killed. If Tenebris isn’t summoned or if Umbra isn’t wielding it, he would then be mortal. Wounds still hurt him despite being immortal.
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Iter per Scissio
eate rifts which allow him to travel anywhere he likes. He can either use this to quickly teleport somewhere or he can imprison other beings in his shadow dimension. Take note that this is an ability that Umbra DOES NOT use in combat. I do see scenarios where Umbra could forcefully transport someone into his shadow dimension and they fight there, but he does not actually use this skill during the battle itself.
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Weaknesses

Tenebris
’s powers. Knocking it away from Umbra would ensure his loss. That is a problem, though, seeing as the sword’s tendrils bind it to Umbra’s arm. One could cut off the Shadow of Death’s arm in order to disarm him. (+1 for the pun? No? Okay then.)
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Ignis Fatuus
obility, it does take a toll on Umbra’s body. Umbra slowly gets weakened every time he uses this form. After three minutes is up, his body gives in and he falls unconscious. He normally saves the final seconds of this form to retreat from battle. He can also be forced out of this form by fire, lightning, electricity, and other such elements.
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Aevitas
nebris, but he can still be wounded and injured. You could cut off his limbs to impede his movement and incapacitate him, but he won’t die because of those wounds. Aside from that, he still feels pain. After countless slices and cuts to his body, he would still be weakened, much like a regular human.
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Umbra Mortis
bra is weak to anything that creates light. That doesn’t mean he’s weak to ambient light, though. This just means that he is weak to fire, electricity, lightning, and any other elements such as those.
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Personality

tle. He very rarely panics and always makes careful, calculated decisions. He is also quiet, reserved, keeps to himself, and shy. Very rarely does he speak unless he has to, and he absolutely hates starting conversations. He is brave, but will not think twice to retreat if it is needed. He believes not every life needs to be taken, but that violence is a necessary evil for this world.
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Appearance
dow of Death looks like he is still in his twenties. Umbra is a white-skinned individual who is fairly muscled. He has spiky black hair and a horizontal, slightly curved scar on his forehead. His left eye is gray while his right eye is a dark shade of blue. His right arm has patches of black, hardened skin with blue runes engraved in a straight line, running from his shoulder to his hand and horizontally on his wrists.
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– the skirt worn by Roman soldiers in order to protect their upper legs. It is made of strong, hardened leather mixed with strips of meteorite. He wears no clothing to protect neither his torso nor his head, believing that helmets and chestplates would slow him down. The only type of protection he has are the dark, meteorite shoulderplates he wears on both shoulders, tied to his body with leather straps which make an X as a result of them crossing. He also wears leather sandals on both of his feet.
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shadow essences in order to make a black hoodie and jeans. He almost always has his hood up, covering his head and making it hard for anyone to see his face. Aside from that, he always covers up his corrupted right arm. He never allows anyone or anything to see the signs of corruption on his right arm. He keeps his sword in a sheath he carries on his back. Using shadow magic, he conjures up an illusion which makes the sheath seem like a backpack to normal people.
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Story
shadows. Umbra wasn’t even his name. In truth, he was once a Roman legionary fighting against the Greek city states during Rome’s early years. Because of his excellence in combat, he was well-respected by his allies and superiors. One day, though, they were faced with an enemy that outnumbered them five-to-one. Hopelessness and despair filled the legionnaire’s hearts as a vast array of Spartan, Athenian, and other Greek soldiers stood across them. All seemed lost when these Greeks charged, spears angling forward.

Suddenly, a dark aura began to emit from the ground itself. Before the Romans could react to this seemingly random phenomenon, they were filled with bloodlust and bravery. Even Umbra himself could feel the power this aura brought coursing through his veins. With loud war cries, they charged towards their Greek counterparts.

The two groups crashed together like waves on the shore. Fueled by his bloodlust, Umbra cleaved through the Greek army with his gladius. There was no other thought in his mind than slaughtering his enemies. Tens of soldiers fell as Umbra and the other Roman legionaries advanced. There was no stopping them. It was an absolute bloodbath, despite the numbers.

As the last Greek fell, the legion’s bloodlust was still not sated. Onward, they marched to the nearest Greek village. It was as if they had become beasts in human skin. The entire village was looted and burnt to the ground. Men, women, and children were put to the sword after the soldiers had committed unspeakable acts of savagery upon them. The villagers had to endure great pain before the legionaries would finally end their suffering. Umbra was no different. He himself ventured off after the village was desecrated in order to find more victims.

While he was wandering around, the effects of the aura still present in him, he started to long for more power. That was when he saw a caravan journeying along the dirt path. Without a second thought, he ran towards the twenty-four guards which flanked the three wagons. They descended upon him like crows on a carcass, surrounding him as he neared the caravan. Umbra fought back, slaying the guards one by one. The wagon drivers soon followed their guards to the afterlife.

A dark aura seemed to flow out through the cloth covering the middle wagon. “Strange,” Umbra remarked. He approached the wagon and lifted the cloth, revealing the source of this aura. It was a sword with a dark serrated blade and iron cross-shaped hilt. Orbs of shadows orbited around this weapon. A voice spoke to Umbra. “Tenebrissssssssss,” the voice said inside his mind, “Snatch it and unlimited power will be yourssss.” Umbra, completely mesmerized, grabbed the sword by the hilt with his right hand.

Immediately, Umbra fell to his knees as dark tendrils extended from the sword’s hilt. He felt his life slowly get sucked out of him. Patches of the skin on his right arm slowly began to harden and turn black. A line of runes slowly wrote itself onto his wrists and horizontally from his shoulder until his hand.

Umbra resisted with all his might, turning his earlier bloodlust into power. His whole body strained to combat the corruption that was taking place. His mind was a battlefield – the ancient spirit inside of Tenebris battling with Umbra’s own mind. The legionary fought with all that he had so he wouldn’t be consumed by this weapon.

Tenebris had long awaited the perfect host to wreak havoc upon the world, but Umbra would not submit. Tenebris himself was forced to bend to Umbra’s will, the corruption stopping at Umbra’s right arm. The legionary regained control of himself before he passed out from exhaustion.

After years of using his blade, Umbra had mastered Tenebris – both the weapon and the spirit it held. Umbra did unspeakable things of horror as he wreaked havoc upon his enemies. He used his powers in serving the Roman Empire, quickly rising through the ranks of its legion.

Slowly, Umbra was returning to his old self. The bloodlust gradually faded away from him until one day, it was completely gone. On that day, he had come to face the reality of his deeds. He was faced with immense guilt of the war crimes he had done. He became depressed and sought to atone for his sins, but he did not know how.

He decided to try to atone for his sins by helping other people. He defended people and villages with his immense skill with the blade. He even lent help to farmers who were harvesting their crops. Every day, he journeyed across the land, depending only on nature for his daily sustenance. He rested every night, sometimes in a kind man’s house, but most times just outside, exposed to the elements.

One particular day, Umbra bit off more than he could chew. After scaring off a group of bandits from a village, the bandit leader vowed to make Umbra pay what he did. The Shadow of Death simply laughed as the bandits scurried away from him. The day was filled with festivities to celebrate what Umbra had done for the village.

During the night, the bandits came back and slaughtered everyone as Umbra was asleep. By the time the Shadow of Death woke, the village was already burnt halfway to the ground. Grabbing Tenebris, he hastily went outside and found the bandits pillaging the village and killing its inhabitants.

Rage filled his heart. Umbra hacked and slashed at the bandits, trying to take them on all by himself. Soon, he was swarmed by tens of bandits who proceeded to inflict multiple wounds on him. He just wouldn’t die. Umbra felt so much pain. Every muscle in his body longed for the sweet release of death, but it just wasn’t meant to be.

Tenebris seemed to glow a darker aura as Umbra fell to his knees, his enemies still stabbing and slicing. Just as he was about to pass out from the pain, he felt a burst of power surge through his veins. A dark orb burst out of Tenebris, causing the bandits to stagger away from Umbra.

Taking this opportunity, Umbra jumped to his feet and slashed at his foes. One by one they fell, unable to fight back even when they recovered from the initial shock. Umbra was just too powerful for them to handle. Bloodlust seemed to fill his mind once again, Tenebris taking this moment to try and overpower its host.

Umbra fought back once again, eventually re-establishing his dominance over the sword’s spirit. He fell to his knees and covered his face with both hands as tears started to fall from his eyes. He failed these people. He caused their deaths. It was his fault.

It wasn’t long before someone came along and found him like this. A heavily armored man, wearing traditional Spartan armor, approached him and gave him a tap on the back. The Spartan and the Roman conversed and a bond of friendship was born. When the talking was over, Umbra had agreed to help Zackeroar in his quest to rid the world of Asheans – monstrous abominations who spread corruption and bring chaos to the land. The same monsters who created Tenebris and summoned the dark aura which influenced the Roman Legion.

The two eventually succeeded in their quest and split up. Zackeroar had business with the Greek gods, leaving Umbra to wander the world alone once again. Thousands of years passed and the world had been changing. Umbra, on the other hand, had not. He still retained his youthful stature and appearance as the world grew more modern. He was forced to adapt to these changes, sticking to the shadows and preferring to be unseen - a protector lurking in the darkness.

Eventually, a corporation known as the RHG had formed. It pitted gladiators against other gladiators. A blood sport, much like how it used to be in Rome. Umbra had his suspicions that the corporation itself was evil and decided to join it. He wanted to know more about this mysterious company from the inside. Unbeknownst to him was the fact that he had a role to play in the War to come. [/spoiler]

Demo


Battle History

Umbra


Zackeroar


Battle Record

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Former Gladiators

Zackeroar, Wrath's Incarnate
ladiator:
Wrath: Given to him by his father, Zeus. This gives Zackeroar the strength of four men. He, although slowly, heals in this state. He can only use this when he gets angry. His senses get enhanced and moves much much better during this state.

Weapons:
This warrior uses a spear with a steel tip and an oak shaft. He has a steel scimitar as well for a secondary weapon. He has a mithril greatsword with a ruby-encrusted golden hilt. It can split into two slender blades by pressing the ruby. His shield is round and made of bronze.


Weaknesses of your Gladiator:
He underestimat

Bad idea to double post; they might ban you. Other than that, this seems like a fine gladiator.

I notice that you often state when he goes into "wrath mode", it would be better if you simply described the transformation. "His hair faded into a gray scale, the whites of his eyes flooded with rivers of blood..." etc. That wasn't a great example, but it was one nonetheless. Also, if you could more clearly state what weapons he uses that'd make things much easier. Other than that, this page checks out and I feel you will benefit quite a bit from the community here. :D

Also, how pronounce his name?! Lol! Is it (Zacky-roar) (Zack-er-oar)? I am so lost on that! :p

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I notice that you often state when he goes into "wrath mode", it would be better if you simply described the transformation. "His hair faded into a gray scale, the whites of his eyes flooded with rivers of blood..." etc. That wasn't a great example, but it was one nonetheless. Also, if you could more clearly state what weapons he uses that'd make things much easier. Other than that, this page checks out and I feel you will benefit quite a bit from the community here. :D

Also, how pronounce his name?! Lol! Is it (Zacky-roar) (Zack-er-oar)? I am so lost on that! :p

No official pronunciation, actually :P. I'm new to this thing so thanks for the tips :) Although I've been writing stories for extra credit for two years, I feel that I am not as good as the guys here. I appreciate the advice. Thanks again!

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Bad idea to double post; they might ban you. Other than that, this seems like a fine gladiator.

Whoops sorry. I didn't know.

Updated availability and edited back story and demo. :D

The thread is undergoing a whole look upgrade. :D

Changed the demo and availability.

After 4 years, I've finally got a new guy! His demo and story are going to be edited later in the day. I just felt like I wanted to have him up now and just add in his backstory and demo later. Feel free to critique! :D

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So you gave your character two ways of travel, the shadow orb and the rips in space through tenebris. Even split under three minutes, a battle takes considerably less and most of the time, you wont expend the entire three minutes anyway. Speed of light is big deal in combat, if you can reposition yourself that fast, its near omnipresence. You could dodge, then reappear at the back of the opponent before a millisecond passes and stab tenebris right through, or if you keep the momentum, slap him with it alongside its infinite mass.

I'd get the protection part, sure ok, you hid yourself in the shadow dimension and all forms of light could rip you our of it but how much really? You never say. Anyway, at this point, I would understand the three minute limit since its full protect but with light speed, its more offensive than defensive tbh.

I propose you ditch the lightspeed thing since you already have a different means to travel. Thats my thoughts.

The rest is fine for me :)

I was actually planning to have Iter per Scissio be a non-combat ability xD. I was going to make Umbra only use it solely for transportation and not for battle. I should've stressed that more, my bad.

Regarding Ignis Fatuus, I see your points. I'm going to adjust the ability so it wouldn't be that overpowered.

Thanks for your feedback! :D

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So you gave your character two ways of travel, the shadow orb and the rips in space through tenebris. Even split under three minutes, a battle takes considerably less and most of the time, you wont expend the entire three minutes anyway. Speed of light is big deal in combat, if you can reposition yourself that fast, its near omnipresence. You could dodge, then reappear at the back of the opponent before a millisecond passes and stab tenebris right through, or if you keep the momentum, slap him with it alongside its infinite mass.

I'd get the protection part, sure ok, you hid yourself in the shadow dimension and all forms of light could rip you our of it but how much really? You never say. Anyway, at this point, I would understand the three minute limit since its full protect but with light speed, its more offensive than defensive tbh.

I propose you ditch the lightspeed thing since you already have a different means to travel. Thats my thoughts.

The rest is fine for me :)

I was actually planning to have Iter per Scissio be a non-combat ability xD. I was going to make Umbra only use it solely for transportation and not for battle. I should've stressed that more, my bad.

Regarding Ignis Fatuus, I see your points. I'm going to adjust the ability so it wouldn't be that overpowered.

Thanks for your feedback! :D

Update Log
-Shortened Ignis Fatuus to thirty seconds
-Changed Ignis Fatuus from lightspeed to "faster than the average man" xD
-Stressed Iter per Scissio to only be used in non-combat

Why can it only be used outside of combat? I've never been a fan of "I could kill you if I wanted, but don't" skills

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Why can it only be used outside of combat? I've never been a fan of "I could kill you if I wanted, but don't" skills

I literally just added it because I thought it would be cool to have a shadow rift-portal sort of thing for easy transportation. As for why it can't be used in combat, I do have a few reasons.

It would take long to open up a portal and need a lot of strength and energy to do so. It wouldn't be like slicing thin air then a portal suddenly pops up. It would be like cutting a piece of lumber using a butcher's knife. That said, it would make Umbra immobile - something that he, a guy that always makes careful, calculated decisions- would avoid in a battle. I guess I should have described how he actually makes the portals. I'll do it in his story and demo. (once I get them done, headache and colds screwing me up tdoday xD)

Umbra Mortis, the Shadow of Death = Shadow of Death, Umbra Mortis

Latin eh? Funny I was going to have a character of mine be named shadow of death in Latin, but you stole it from me >:C . Jk, I jest, but cool character though! Also, where in the Philippines are you? My mother was born and raised in Cebu, but moved to the States. She wasn't nice enough to teach my how to speak Tagalog or anything though >:/ . Jk, I jest, but I still only speak English.

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Umbra Mortis, the Shadow of Death = Shadow of Death, Umbra Mortis

Latin eh? Funny I was going to have a character of mine be named shadow of death in Latin, but you stole it from me >:C . Jk, I jest, but cool character though! Also, where in the Philippines are you? My mother was born and raised in Cebu, but moved to the States. She wasn't nice enough to teach my how to speak Tagalog or anything though >:/ . Jk, I jest, but I still only speak English.

Yes, I've taken an interest in Roman history so yeah. xD Sorry about stealing the name Umbra Mortis lol. Currently, I'm living in Cavite, but I was born in Manila.