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Jan 3, 2014 8:07 AM #1135081
Name:
Aiba Kannagi

Weapons:
Mikadsuchi: A lightning rod turned kuda-yari that emits electricity. Light in weight and extremely durable, it was the perfect replacement for Aiba's now broken katana.

Susanoō: A kukri knife that possesses the powers of the Mystical Wind Spirit, molded with the remains of Aiba's sword. This weapon is now the key to unleash his "Soul Mode".

Semi-Automatic Pistol: A standard pistol. Similar to the Jericho 941.

Abilities:
Can control wind and electricity, which grants him teleportation

Very fast on foot

Incredible reflex and instinct

Can sense danger within a short distance

Above average strength

Trained in combat

Can summon Mikadsuchi whenever he pleases

Fairly skilled in improvising and creating weapons

Can adapt to any normal weapon

"Soul Mode"- A special state that Aiba can go into, concentrating all of his power to grant an ultimate state for a short amount of time. It significantly increases his speed, strength, stamina, precision, and reflexes. It also absorbs the injuries he was inflicted.

Weaknesses:
Almost never tries to kill his opponent, which leads to limiting his power

Weak against earth element sorcerors;wind and electricity magic becomes useless, which limits him with only physical attacks

His pistol is his only long-ranged attack solution

Limited area for danger sensing

Recently acquired elemental powers; cannot use advanced techniques

Can teleport for only a short range

Is basically a normal human, except when in Soul Mode

Uses Soul Mode only when Aiba feels it is necessary

Cannot use Soul Mode for more than 10 minutes

After the use of Soul Mode, the kukri becomes rusty, making it useless in battle. It returns to normal state after 4 hours. This puts him in a state that he can only fight with only half of his power, until he gets time to rest his body. Also, the injuries that he was caused prior to Soul Mode slowly comes back as the rust of the blade fades.
Personality:
Extremely friendly and kind

Merciful

Has a long temper, but cold-blooded and merciless when truly infuriated

Never underestimates an opponent

Appearance:
Age-18

Height-5'9''

Weight-180lbs

Hair-Grey (From Posttraumatic Disorder), short and spiky.

Eyes-Blue (Originally brown, changed when he posessed mythical powers)

Slightly tan skin

Wears a black jacket over a black hoodie with red lining, with a dark grey t-shirt under, jeans with a belt, and flat sneakers.

Story:
Story (Click to Show)


Demo:

Demo (Click to Show)


Clan:

The Wind Chasers- Creator and Leader
http://forums.stickpage.com/showthread.php?80473-The-Wind-Chasers-Rebels-of-Peace
Battle Record:



Win/Loss/Tie/Forfeit Ratio:

4/0/3/1

Availiability:

Slightly busy, but I'm availiable

Hitlist:

I usually wait for other people to challenge me, but I'll put one down, just in case I might go into a battling rampage.

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Jan 3, 2014 9:07 AM #1135092
Hmm, this looks pretty good given that you written it on your phone, but it clearly needs some work. A little thing you can do is to double space, which is simply to just press the enter button twice instead of once; it'll help a lot when someone is reading your story and demo since it makes a little more easier on the eyes to look at~

Anyways to your glady~Aiba's powers are alright and your weaknesses seem fine, though maybe you can add a little bit of an explanation or a weakness to his wind and thunder manipulation? Or maybe expand his "danger sensing" ability, or add a limitation to that to even things out? I dunno, that's what I think~

Also with his story I couldn't help but laugh at his mom ordering his siblings to attack him~I'm not sure if that makes me a horrible person or something XD

Overall he seems pretty good, so good luck in future battles deary~
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Jan 3, 2014 9:18 AM #1135097
Thanks for the review!
I hope I get to know you more. Maybe one day we'll go against each other, which I am hyped about.
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Jan 3, 2014 9:47 AM #1135104
Few things.

Lightning, not thunder. Thunder is the sound that lightning makes, while lightning is the electron discharge, which I believe is what you meant. Of course. If it was indeed meant to be thunder, would be curious about how that could be combat effecient. :) just my first point.

Compared to most wRHGs, you are on par. I mean his powers are good and beatable while his weaknesses make sense (I'm judging from a opponent sortof way) . Furthermore, as our dear friend Acute did mention, find some limitations to your abilities. Like he can only sense danger if he concentrates. Maybe he can't use lightning and wind at the same time? Or there's a recharge inbetween? And be specific with how the earth based magic is a weakness. Because I can always throw dirt in your face and then you're suddenly weakened.

Like Acute also mentioned, you can clean up a bit once you're on a pc or something, because there are a few mistakes which can be seen with another read-through by you I'm guessing. Like spoilers and stuff.

Finishing up however: welcome. Enjoy. Hope it may be an experience. We're a scary bunch, but we're friendly and helpful. Hope to see some battles up soon.
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Jan 3, 2014 10:01 AM #1135116
Thanks for the review!
Yeah, I realized that thunder wasn't right as soon as I posted it lol.
I see what needs to be done


Alright, that should clean it up a bit...
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Jan 3, 2014 4:25 PM #1135291
care for a challenge
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Jan 3, 2014 5:10 PM #1135309
Sure! I'm new to all this and I'm going to post mostly from my phone, so I'm going to need some help from you with posting the battle, but if you're ok with that, I accept.
Awesome character you got by the way. I love anthropomorphistic characters, and which excites me more is that it's a friggin GRIFFIN! I'm excited to go against you!
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Jan 3, 2014 6:18 PM #1135334
ok ill message you the details of the challenge
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Feb 11, 2014 3:36 PM #1156774
Updated y'all
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Feb 13, 2014 12:37 PM #1157743
I think you'll be the first person I will challenge once I go back to wRHG (to be honest, I used to be a part of the wRHG but retired but going to go back soon [maybe, next month? lol]). Well nice wRHG anyways, good luck on future battles~

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Feb 13, 2014 12:53 PM #1157753
All right, that's good to know. Hope you come back soon!
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Feb 15, 2014 12:59 PM #1158995
Requesting for a challenge! I don't care if you accept or decline it, I just want to have fun c: Here's my wRHG (and I would like it more when you read my demo lol.)

http://forums.stickpage.com/showthread.php?80586-Charlotte-quot-Charlie-quot-Hyshards
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Apr 11, 2014 12:43 PM #1185780
Thinking about deleting danger sensing, since I've lever used it before.
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Apr 13, 2014 12:54 AM #1186148
ken, i think you should add more details to your appearance .
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Apr 13, 2014 2:52 AM #1186172
Quote from Lethal5
ken, i think you should add more details to your appearance .


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