Full Name: Dracustos Amitola Achak ("Amitola" Native American for "Rainbow, "Achak" Native American for "Spirit")
Nicknames: Draco, Drac
Relationship: Currently dating Samantha (see Residents of Rejection)



val weapons. His signature weapon is a pair of swords with golden blades and light blue and black hilts, similar to FLLFFL's in shape. These can combine in two ways; along the long edge of the blades to form a sort of broadsword, and at the end of the hilts to make a dual-sided weapon. They are sharp enough to cut through most material. He does not use weapons against an unarmed opponent.
around since medieval times. They were forged by one of the greatest blacksmiths, and enchanted by a sorcerer for eternal sharpness and the ability to fuse into one weapon. For a time they belonged to a great warrior who served a king, until he eventually fell in battle and his swords were never recovered. After a few years a hunter scavenged them from the battlefield. He found they were sharp enough to easily cut through dragons' hides, and much dragon blood was spilled over the next few years. When the hunter finally retired, he passed the swords to his son, and they eventually became a family heirloom, passed from generation to generation. They eventually came into the hands of the leader of The Tribe, and after his defeat the townspeople gave them to Dracustos as a gift of gratitude. He can sense that the blades were dragon killers every time he's near them, but he uses them anyways so they'll have a good reputation when he's gone.[/spoiler]

He has been known to bite or scratch when his instincts kick in, or when he needs to. He may use his teeth and claws more often in Feral State, along with his horns.[/spoiler]

eed projectiles (such as a thrown rock), sharp objects can easily slip between his scales or even go through them. This is a larger problem for his underside, as severe wounds to the chest can take him down easily.
s chest but is larger, along with his lungs. He has two sets of pectoral muscles, the secondary belonging to his wings. If you were to drive a blade through the center of these two sets, you'd have a high chance of hitting his heart if you get through the sternum. He also has a separate set of shoulder blades for his wings.[/spoiler]

-If the crystal in his skull is damaged, he cannot teleport properly (meaning he'll end up where he doesn't mean to) or even not at all. Teleporting also takes much energy. The further the distance, the more energy it takes. Transporting inanimate objects doesn't take as much, so he mainly uses it to retrieve his weapons. He can only teleport objects to and from him, not from one spot to another. He can teleport people, but only if he's in physical contact with them.

-He can only breathe his white fire in short bursts. Even though the coating of his throat and mouth can handle the other flames just fine, it gets worn down quicker with the super-heated fire, causing it to burn those areas should it be used too much.

-Draco's ability to breathe, create, and manipulate fire comes from something known among dragons as the Heartfire. It's the source of dragons' breath, and the life-giving force that some dragons can share with someone of their choosing. It is what sustains them, and if it is somehow taken from Draco (the only known way is through pyrokinenis), he will not only lose his fire abilities, he will also die within days. If it is only partially taken, it will weaken his fire abilities. The Heartfire will strengthen the fire abilities of whomever takes it, as well as give them more control over fire.

-Though hard to flare up, his anger can lead him into a bad spot. Not only would it cloud his judgement, but it makes it easier for Irascor to take over.

-His Rage State can also be a problem. Because this power is drawn from Irascor, he may become overly aggressive. This can eventually lead to Draco zoning out to clear his mind, leaving him open to attack.

-Due to the danger Irascor poses to others, Dracustos has become hesitant in using Rage State, even if it is needed. He has also gained a fear of losing control and hurting those close to him.

-He doesn't get tired easily, but once he does his movements are slowed and continue to slow as he becomes more fatigued.

-Though very resistant to temperature changes, the cold makes him sluggish. Given his reptilian nature, his body prefers heat, causing him to be more susceptible to extreme cold. He is more resistant to extreme heat, but it can also become a problem, as Dracustos has no sweat glands and therefore cannot cool himself.

-When willingly letting Irascor take control, Dracustos is aware of what is happening, even though he is not in control. He can, however, resist an action Irascor may do, usually resulting in a mental battle for power. This leaves him open for attack. Harsh blows to the head can cause a sudden change into Berserker, in which case Draco has no control whatsoever and will remember nothing. He will oftentimes pass out when this form recedes.

-Irascor tends to remain silent, but every now and then he likes to give his two cents. As you can imagine, a voice in your head can be very distracting during battle.

- Dracustos is not fireproof on the inside. This limits the use of Berserker, as the extremely high body temperature will begin to damage him internally. It also makes him susceptible to dehydration.

-If Irascor is somehow nullified, it will take away Draco's ability to use either form.

-Due to the sensitivity of his ears, it is possible to trigger a sensory overload. This will result in one of two things: either Draco will simply pass out, or one of his forms will be triggered and he will have no control over himself, essentially "going wild". Such a sound tends to be out of range of human hearing. [/spoiler]

eaning he is half human, half dragon. As a child he lived with his human mother, Leia, in a house a few miles from a small town named Rejection. He never went into the town himself, but he would receive visits from the residents. During this time he saw his dragon father Caesitus often, as he was the one who taught Dracustos how to control and use his powers. But one day, without explanation, his father vanished. In his teens Dracustos began training himself to fight out of pure boredom. At age 16 his mother died of an unknown illness. Her funeral was when his father returned, and he continues to occasionally visit his son. Because he had nowhere else to go, Dracustos remained in his mother's house. When he turned 20, he ventured into Rejection. It was a nice town, but it had one problem; it was overrun by a gang called The Tribe. Dracustos got into a fight with them, and essentially saved the town. From then on he has been praised as a hero in Rejection. But since then, nothing has really happened that required his attention, so he joined the RHG to prevent himself from getting lazy.
with most. Feel free to use them as NPCs but please be gentle.

Caesitus - Draco's father. Large enough to bite a man in half, powerful magic-wielder. Has the rare ability among Fire Dragons to breathe ice as well as fire. Around 730 years old. Though he technically does not live in the town itself, he is still considered one of them; the town is part of his territory. In a way he is a halfbreed himself; part Draco flameus (Fire Dragon), part Draco orientalis (Asian Lung). This gives him the armor of a Western, but the elegance of an Eastern. He typically walks on all fours and sports a pair of large, narrow wings. His body is a noodle (serpentine) with three rows of waving spines. Three pairs of inward-curving horns decorate his head like a crown, and his nose bears a single horn. Behind his nostrils are "whiskers" associated with Orientals. Eyes are crystal blue, body is warmly colored with touches of black. His underbelly turns an icy white and pale blue when using his ice breath.
Using transformation magics, Caesitus is able to disguise himself as human. Though he could choose any appearance, he typically has the same look; short to mid-range shaggy hair colored like fire, jeans or cargo pants, plain-colored T (usually white), and a brown or black trench coat or duster. Stands at around 6'. Eyes remain blue.
Because he and Dracustos are related, they share a weak Bond with each other. Caesitus can sense any strong emotions his son may feel, as well as the strength of his lifeforce, and also has somewhat of a homing ability on Dracustos.
Sketchy Visual Reference

Iroh Chang Lee - Everyone's Chinese grandfather, village elder. Stands at around 5' 3", has that classic thin, white mustache and beard of the "old-but-bad-ass" sensei. Tea is a passion of his, as well as cooking. He owns a diner called The White Lotus. The tables and chairs of said diner are decorated with kirin and oriental dragons, and an occasional painting hangs on the wall opposite the windowed side. In the back is a fountain of the four Chinese Dragon Kings; a legend Iroh will gladly tell. Next to the diner is a dojo he also owns, and has classes on weekends. He may be old, but he can still kick some ass. One of Draco's closest friends.

Rachel Ray Blakely - Widowed due to The Tribe. Average height and muscle build, but stronger than she looks. Hair runs past her shoulders and is a deep red, and her eyes are green. She works as a nurse in Rejection's small hospital, Twin Snakes. She has a 7-year-old son named Drake. Drake is an energetic ball of happy and he loves animals. He often sees Draco as a father figure and usually refers to him as "Mr. Draco". His hair is brown and eyes green; looks a lot like his dad. Sometimes Dracustos babysits him.

Finn Cedric O'Connor - Local Irishman, loves a good pint. Brown hair, blue eyes, lean build, stands at about 5' 6". He has a bit of experience with mythical beings himself, though he was very young at the time. His mother, Erica, moved to America after losing her husband to the Hallow while trying to protect their son. Finn took up his father's work as a mycologist (studies fungi), and Erica works at the herb shop Draco's mother used to own.

Samantha Lee Duca - An extreme tomboy of a 23-year-old, usually goes by Sam. Thin, lean, and strong, she'll try to kick anyone's ass if the need comes. Her hair is dark brown and barely goes past her chin, and her eyes are light brown. Stands at 5' 10". She usually works at the herb shop, but occasionally she'll take up work at the Lotus. Has a bit of a crush on Dracustos.

Bruce Alexander Wayne - Former Tribe member. He ran from home as a youngster, and having nowhere else to go he joined the gang's ranks. He spent a couple years in Juvi before being released on good behavior, and now spends his life trying to make amends for what The Tribe has done, though he himself didn't really do much in terms of hurting people. He's one of the youngest in Rejection's police force.[/spoiler]
his wrath. But he was not a destructive being as one might think. He was a gentle soul, befriending many who crossed paths with the beast. Many consisted of villagers who lived nearby his lair.

The king of this land was a gracious one, kind and giving, but firm when the need came. He soon caught wind of the beast, and so decided to meet him.

The man and the dragon became close friends. The creature would protect the kingdom, even fighting in wars for the king, but he asked for nothing in return except the man’s companionship. The king, of course, could not let such selfless deeds go unrewarded. He gave gifts of gold and precious jewels to the dragon after each deed.

One day, a stranger came into the kingdom. He despised dragons, and so sought to rid the land of the beast. He whispered poisoned words to the people and worked his way to the king, poisoning his mind with false claims of the beast. Eventually, the gracious ruler declared war upon the dragon.

It was late in the evening. The king had invited the dragon to his courtyard. The beast gladly accepted, but little did he know it was a trap. He was attacked by the knights he once fought alongside. Badly injured, he fled to his lair, where his confusion over the betrayal drove him mad. The flames of his wrath burned his scales black, leaving his mark and eyes to glow like fire.

When the king and his men reached the lair, they were met by a beast filled with rage and hatred. Its flames consumed them, teeth and claws ripped them apart. The stranger managed to fatally wound the dragon, but he too was slain by his talons.

The dragon’s spirit never found rest. It lay dormant with its body that would never move again in a dark, cold cavern. Until the day the old lair was discovered by a woman, followed by a dragon companion whom was overly concerned for her safety... because she was with child...[/spoiler] [/spoiler]

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Though I haven't been on this forum for that long either, from experience, I can tell you a few things.
First, your sentences are SOOO hard to read. As XDHunterNest said, you have a very unique and interesting character. But what's the point of writing something no one can read? This is why paragraphs and space between quotes exist. What happens if you don't is that the reader will not understand who is saying what to start. This was a huge problem for me too.

Second, your weaknesses for the character are too "weak" (ba dum chee). Most of them make sense, but I feel like you don't have enough. Personally, the ratio of abilities/weaknesses for this character is around 7:3. Add more weaknesses, or be more specific with your existing ones.

On the other hand, you have a very descriptive tone, which in this case helps greatly. Though there were minor mistakes, your grammer is well too. Clean it up by using spaces and put spoilers on the longer ones.

Don't know if my advice will help, a I hope you have a swell time here!

I'll go for my own CnC, then.


Regarding powers, I like them. It's not every day you get a draconian in RHG (or even wRHG), and I feel the powers are actually quite balanced. While adding another weakness won't hurt, I'm pretty sure it's balanced enough.

I'll be loving to face this character in a battle someday.

I apologize for the hard-to-read sentences. I'm new and don't exactly know how the text in these threads work.

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I apologize for the hard-to-read sentences. I'm new and don't exactly know how the text in threads work.

It's fine. We're here for ya :)

How much did you write? 5000? But still, I like it! Maybe the appearence could be a little normal without the scales...... ^~^

Thanks for the comment. :D And I would do the spoilers thing, but I don't know how. Could you share this great secret with me?

{spoiler=Witty to Semi-witty title}Lots of words.{/spoiler}
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Welcome back?

Thank you very much!

My criticism is just a little somethin somethin to help make reading this a little bit easier. Lets start with the powers



A few questions about his powers though. First, how much hotter than standard fire is the light blue fire? Second, fire can pretty much already burn earth and stone anyways, so I don't see much of a point in the brown fire. Third, you don't state that he can use normal fire, unless I just missed it in my reading, so can he use normal fire? Fourth, does going full dragon mode affect the strength of his fire attacks?

Aside from those minor things, I like the powerset you've got laid out, very nice.[/spoiler]

Next, I'll talk about the weapons (This one will be short, so I'm not gonna give it a spoiler).

Weapons CnC: I like your weapon choice, it's definitely a little bit different, which I see as a good thing. I also like the bit about him not using weapons against an unarmed opponent, cool. Overall, weapons are looking pretty sound.

Weaknesses CnC: I don't have much to really critique about this one either, it looks sound, interesting weaknesses, keeping the character rounded, I like it.

In fact, everything else looks pretty sound, and I really like the character, and look forward to seeing you on the battlefield. IN FACT, I'm looking forward to seeing him in action so much that I will leave you with this:

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A few questions about his powers though. First, how much hotter than standard fire is the light blue fire? Second, fire can pretty much already burn earth and stone anyways, so I don't see much of a point in the brown fire. Third, you don't state that he can use normal fire, unless I just missed it in my reading, so can he use normal fire? Fourth, does going full dragon mode affect the strength of his fire attacks?

The super-heated fire is hot enough to melt most metals. The reason for the brown fire is fire needs fuel other than oxygen to burn, which is hard on plain ground and stone. Given he is half dragon, I thought it was obvious he could use plain fire. His Full Dragon form does not effect the strength of his fire attacks.

Since I know very well that you're still active and that you're using this character, I think I'll shamelessly bump this so that I can easily reference it for...
OUR GLORIOUS AND EPIC COMBAT.
That is all.

Damn! This is cool. Also, it is freakily close to my char's abilities, when it comes to the beast part (though at the same time entirely different, which is a good thing). Needless to say, I love it. Since the CnC has already been taken care of, I only have to second ZoomXoom.
If you accepted his challenge, I'd like to call shotgun. In other words, I'd like to fight you next. I think a battle between our chars would be freakin' awesome!

Cool WRHG. and... I don't have any CNC. for you... at the moment.