daily comic strip

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Apr 29, 2014 11:37 AM #1191101
yo guys, havent been on here in a while, decided to make a daily comic strip, so pop by every now and then to see whats up
https://www.facebook.com/teaksentertainment/photos/a.1446502648898973.1073741827.1446500815565823/1487849648097606/?type=1&theater
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Apr 29, 2014 10:48 PM #1191214
It's not really that good.

Seems liek you're really into boondocks though.
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Apr 30, 2014 2:58 PM #1191391
Lol. It's kind of funny but you need to work on your cartoon style a bit.
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May 2, 2014 7:40 AM #1191764
You've got a pretty decent grasp on expression and getting the feeling of characters across I've noticed. Ive semi-familiar with your other works so i dont think "drawing" per-say is your issue here more-so the "style" you chose the render your characters in.

Right now you have a black almost pixeleated feeling lineart for your characters which is ok typically. Unfortunately you've chosen to render your characters shading and colors in a very soft shaded way. The two really dont mesh well together and leaves you with this almost washed out watercolor like feeling. I would say if you were to use a more cohesive drawing style (and perhaps neaten up your figures in general) your comics presentation would increase dramatically and probably receive a better reception.

***Also pro tip. Try not to reference pop culture much in daily comics. While it does give you material to readily access and makes jokes with, overtime the jokes become less relevant and readers who come in at later dates and read your earlier comics my either not get or really find the joke funny/relevant any more. VERY few people are able to consistently use pop culture to make jokes and keep them relevant over a period of time ie (southpark, familyguy, robot chicken, etc).

all in all it was an ok strip, you might want to work on your writing too, the "no! I will "wreak" you bitches" line felt really awkward because of the "no!" I couldn't imagine the dialogue being spoken aloud and the no part quite fitting which threw off the whole punchline for me.

*one thing I've come to realize after studying comics for the last 6 years is that a comic can have mediocre drawing and damn good writing and still be successful, the opposite on the other hand... not so much. :/ (things to keep in mind~)