Dark Dreams

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May 2, 2014 9:59 PM #1191940
Darkness creeps where light cannot,
My inner wars are all for naught,
Sleeping beasts now awake,
Suffering I cannot take,
Round and round my mind it goes,
Through my soul the feeling flows,
The night falls...I cannot see,
Where this nightmare is taking me.


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May 8, 2014 8:00 PM #1193424
While I was reading it I could really feel the misery of the poem itself.
I liked it.

Now a suggestion, what about making the poem more personal? Like saying "My inner wars" instead of making it "inner wars"?