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Nov 28, 2014 7:38 PM #1274868
Xenomorph Alien Warrior versus my own creature inspired by it.

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Nov 30, 2014 9:29 PM #1275846
Okay, this is my first CnC in a good long while, so I'm still getting back into the swing of things. That being said, I want to say that this is a really good story, I really enjoyed writing it, and it was a very fluent read, however I did have one minor problem with it. I was somewhat confused as to who 'The Warrior' was referring to. At first I thought it was referring to the NightCaria, but later on you called the Alien the Xenomorph Alien Warrior, which threw me off a bit. Now, that confusion may have just been me not reading carefully enough at the beginning. I tend to read pretty loosely when I start reading something new, which is a huge fault of mine.

That being said, one easy way to avoid the confusion is to simply describe the two creatures throughout the story, giving small details about each creature's appearance, linked through larger details (such as colors), to give indication of which creature is performing and/or receiving the actions.

Other that that however, I really enjoy this and I like it a lot, keep up the good work.



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Nov 30, 2014 11:47 PM #1275904
Thanks for you comments/crits!
I seriously LOVE these CNC things to death because I just really want to be the best writer I can be!
Users of the forum such as Crank, the Gentleman, and many others have given me TONS of help so far.
If you're interested in animation though, let me know what you think about my works by clicking the "Animations by Me" link in my signature. :D
Even if you're not interested, you could just click it for fun, I like it when people watch my videos. :)
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Dec 1, 2014 1:41 AM #1275946
Trust me, I love receiving them too, its nice to know that others support me and are willing to take time out of their days to help me make my writing better. I share the same feelings as you about CnC. And Ill be sure to take a moment to check out your stuff when I have a bit of free time.
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