Silent Cries For Help (Chapter 3 Added)

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Mar 9, 2015 6:37 AM #1323102
Update: 3/15/2015: Having family problems so next chapter will be delayed.
Update 3/13/2015: Chapter 1 Added
Update 3/10/2015: Chapter 1 may be a bit late because lots of stuff happening around me.
Update 5/14/2015: Chapter Two finally added. SO SORRY FOR THE DELAY. My parents are getting a divorce and they were being stubborn and not paying the cable bill. I also just moved into my new apartment out of my parents place.
Update:6/5/2015: Chapter Three is here!

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s why I got suspended from school so many times. My parent’s hate me now and I honestly think that’s pretty dope, like you got to be one major bad ass for your own parent’s to hate you. Today I get to go back to school and of course the only reason I do go is because if I don’t the boss would kick my ass.

“Get the fuck up, Leon. Your super late” he threw water on me

I sit up fast and throw a pillow at him

“Bastard” I shout and start towards him but before I could even leave the bed I was suddenly on the floor and he was standing above me with that smug look on his face and a cigarette in his mouth.

After that I got up took my shower, brushed my teeth, ate my breakfast and strolled to school. Luckily it was within walking distance because the boss would never drive me anywhere. I walked into class late and everyone stared at me as if I killed someone.

“The fuck y’all staring at” I growl throwing my bag down and taking my seat

Everyone turned around quick except for the girl next to me. I had a reputation for being the school’s biggest and baddest delinquent, no one messed with me so it really annoyed me when this girl was staring at me.

I turned and glared back at her. She was a total nerd. She wore glasses and she had everything laid on neatly on her desk. Her hair was black and long, totally plain. I did notice though she had a serious rack.

“Stop staring at me, nerd” I bark at her

“Okay” she turned back towards the front of the classroom and took notes

What a fucking weirdo

There was only two good things about school in my opinion. Number one was the free food, well food isn't really free but I could easily get it for free from the local chumps. Number two was I could get undisturbed sleep, well this only happens because if someone wakes me I’ll probably break a couple of their bones.

I ended up falling asleep during the lecture it was lunch time when the nerd girl woke me up by putting something on my desk. I sit up slowly to see it’s a notebook with my name on it. I look up at her

“What is this?” I ask her opening it

It was filled with the notes from the lecture the teacher was giving earlier. I closed it and tossed it in the trash then started towards the cafeteria.

“I think you should at least try and pass, Leon” she said stopping me dead in my tracks by grabbing my arm

I snatched my arm from her and turned around to give her my famous “Delinquent Stare” as the student’s named it. When i did she stared back at me not cowering and running away like everyone else.

The fuck is with this girl? Why won’t she leave me alone?

I sucked my teeth then turned around and walked away. I could hear her friends run over to her afterwards

“Lia, are you crazy or something!” the blonde one shouted at her

“Yeah, that was super hardcore” the redhead said

“How dare he just throw the notes you worked so hard on away” the guy said

Oh, big scary guy gonna give me a stern talking to?

I chuckle to myself and started walking again when the nerd girl surprises me again

“I’m not giving up on him like everyone else! I know he’s a good person” she shouted at them before storming away

I continued my walk towards the cafeteria trying not to think about what she said but i couldn't keep it from bothering me so i decided I’d find her after school. When I get to the cafeteria the line to wait is ridiculous, but lines don’t apply to me. I start to bully my way to the front but a couple of kids decide to stand up to me.

“No, you have to wait in line like everyone else” the shorter one said

“Yeah man, no one is scared of you anymore” the other one said

My eyebrow twitched in annoyance and as I grabbed the shorter one the nerd girl came out of nowhere and grabbed my other arm and pulled me away, saving the two from getting their asses kicked. The nerd girl dragged me a good ways away until she finally let go.

“What the hell is your problem” I shouted at her “Every since this morning you been plucking my nerves!”

When she regained her breath she stood up straight and grabbed my hand

“I want to help you!” she yelled back at me “Just like you helped me a long time ago”

The memory came flowing back to me. A long time ago, when i was just 10, there was a group of boys picking on some girl and i saved her and kicked all their asses. Although I only did it because they called me stupid last week.

She must think I saved her that time

I didn't want to lie to her but I didn't want to hurt her feelings because I'm against hurting girls, only complete scum do that. So I accepted her offer.

“You think you can help me? Do it”

She hands me a sandwich from the cafeteria and the notebook from earlier then smiled at me. From then on I could tell this would be a long school year.
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the door

The walk to school today had more surprises than one . The first one was Lia showing up out of nowhere with a packed lunch for me.

“Goodmorning Leon!” she shouted a little bit down the street waving

I was shocked. I paused and stared at her for a second then I practically ran towards her.

Fuck Fuck Fuck Fuck Fuck

I looked around and everyone was staring at her then back at me. She must be insane coming to a neighborhood like this. I grabbed her by the hand and brought her back to my house. Once within the safety of my home I turned and looked at her.

“Are you insane? Do you have some kind of deathwish? Are you delusional?” I ask her

“I just wanted to walk with you to school, we live pretty close. I like in the next neighborhood” she said pouting

THE NEXT NEIGHBORHOOD OVER? THATS WHERE THE SUPER RICH LIVE.

I was stuck for a second and then the devious idea to use her for money floated into my head but i was trying not to be bad all the time so i kicked it out of my head.

“Okay, we’ll walk to school but instead I’ll meet you at the intersection”

She should be safe there, cops be all over that place.

“And never come to my neighborhood ever again, okay?” she nodded still with a pout on her face

The second surprise on the way to school was a creepy stalker popping up out of the blue. It was Miranda, a girl so clearly obsessed with me. She ran towards me and wrapped her arms around me. After a moment she took notice of Lia

“What the fuck is this? This your new play thing, Leon?” she badgered me as if I was cheating on her

I ignore her, grabbed Lia’s hand and kept walking down the street. Lia looked back over her shoulder and then looked up at me. I couldn’t believe she showed up now of all times. When we got to the intersection the final and worst surprise happened Lia’s friend’s catching us red-handed holding hands. As soon as i saw them i dropped her hand . It was over now everyone would think we’re a couple.

“You guys aren’t like dating or anything are you?” her blonde friend asked

She seemed like the quiet one of the group she was always wearing her hair in a bun and constantly clinging to the red headed girl even now as she talked she was wrapped around her arm.

Closet lesbians

The guy friend was glaring at me the whole time I was standing there. I glared back at him, with his rich boy clothes on and his black shiny hair he even carried a messenger bag with some kind of sticker on it.

Faggot

“No, we’re just, like partners in crime” Lia said with an enthusiastic look on her face

Idiot

I started to walk away and the guy friend stepped in front of me pushing his hand to my chest. I looked down at his hand then back up at him.

“If you-” I interrupted him by smacking his hand away and shoving him backwards

“If you touch me again, I’ll break you” I glared at him and put my hands back in my pockets

I started to walk away again when i was interrupted by what sounded like someone very far away calling my name. I turned around and all of Lia’s friends were gone and Lia herself was drifting further and further away from me. I reached out to her but every time I got close to her she would get further and further.

She called out to me as she drifted further and further away from me. I was snapped back to reality when Lia put her hand on my shoulder

“LEON!” she yelled at me

“Oh I’m sorry i was in the middle of a thought” I made up a quick lie, benefits of lying for years

Her friends were all staring at me and Lia grabbed my hand and we started walking to school along with her friends. The rest of the trip was awkward yet informative at the same time. The blonde girl’s name is Susan, the redhead’s name is Rebekah, and the guys name was Dion.
Total faggot name

Dion’s dad owned a couple of the chain restaurants in the area and he was going to give them all to Dion when he turns 18. Susan and Rebekah have known each other for the majority of their lives and Susan has some kind of mental breakdown when they’re apart.

Definite closet lesbians

In my opinion Lia was the only normal one out of the group her mom and dad are both doctors that work with the government on top secret shit that they can’t tell anyone else about.

She probably comes with a whole bunch of connections

Once at school I finally get a break from all the shit that’s happened this morning. 1st period is my favorite time to sleep because the windows are always open and its nice and breezy, not too hot yet. The teacher comes in and starts on his lecture and I lay my head down ready to fall asleep.

However, I’m not even a full minute into my nap when something jabs the side of my head. I ignore it. It happens again this time harder. I open my eyes to see Lia leaning over poking the side of my head with a pencil. I groan and sit up.

“Pay attention to the teacher so you can learn something” she whispered

“You don’t have to pay attention to learn, everything is in the books or on the internet” I mumble laying back down

Before I could even close my eyes this time Lia starts rapidly poking me in the head. I groan again and sit back up

“What the fuck do you want” I accidently shouted

The teacher turned around quick with a stern look on his face “Who said that” in less than a second everyone was pointing at me, everyone but Lia who was doodling in her notebook.

“Get out” he said the stern look dissipating

I stood up and the teacher jumped as if I was going to hit him. I go down to pick up my bag and the teacher loses his shit and starts yelling.

“STOP IT. GET OUT RIGHT NOW! RIGHT NOW!” he yells at me pointing to the door

“I’m just getting my-” he interrupts me and starts yelling for security
The school’s deputy rush in as if he was standing outside and grab me trying to wrestle me down to the floor and handcuff me.

“I WASN’T DOING ANYTHING GET THE FUCK OFF ME!” I yell “I can fucking walk” I push him off me and walk out the door

He escorted me to the principal’s office and the principal waved for him to leave. The principal stood up and walked over to me as if he was going to give me the ‘you need to straighten up’ lecture but he gave me something completely different. He leaned back in his chair and started laughing.

The fuck is this?

“It must be hard having EVERYONE look down on you” he put way too much emphasis on the word ‘everyone’

I stayed silent and let him continue his lecture or whatever he was giving me. The old man turned around and smiled at me

“I’m on your side you know. I feel your pain, man. You know, you should keep getting in trouble and being yourself because we get big bonuses in funding for having extreme problem children like you. I think one of your friends is transferring in to, Zack.”

Zack was some kid who was always around me that got sent to juvie for stabbing a teacher with his pencil. He was walking with a pencil in his hand, tripped, and just happened to stab the teacher. It was totally innocent but because he always hung around me everyone thinks he did it on purpose. He was sentenced to 2 years in juvie but because he flipped out in the courtroom and threw a chair at the judge he gained another 3 years. He’s always had a bad temper.

I glared at him and he burst out into laughter

Only at SP High does the principal tell you to get in trouble and laugh when you threaten him and the teachers tell you to get out and then call the cops when you take too long. Only at SP High.

The principal, in the middle of his laughter, waved for me to get out. Just in time for lunch. I open the door to the hallway and bump into a girl. I think this moment changed my life forever.

She fell down and scattered the papers she was carrying everywhere. The way she fell her panties were visible I sneak a quick peek, red stripes, and then I kneel down to help her.

“I’m sorry” I mumble under my breath
“Don’t worry about it and I’ll pretend you didn’t just glance at my panties, you perverted fuck, but I might just murder you later so watch out” she smiled and started picking up papers

I chuckled at her threat. She looked like a normal teenage girl except she had green braids and had a tribal face tattoo underneath her left eye. Making her not normal at all. I finished helping her pick up the papers and left.

I walked into the lunchroom and as normal I walked right up the the front of the line, grinning as the kids behind me started complaining until I turned and gave them the evil stare. I grabbed my tray and started towards my table when I saw Lia and all of her friends sitting there. It was literally my table because i craved ‘Leon’s table. sit here and die’ then signed it with a skull. I walked up and my left eye started to twitch in annoyance when they didn’t even move but Lia scooted over and patted the chair next to her.

“Fuck off” I growled and everyone looked up at me and started to move when Lia stopped them with her words that came as a surprise to me

“Come on Leon, we’re all friends here!” she said with that same pouting expression from this morning

Friends? What the fuck are friends?

“I don’t need friends” I mumble before walking off

Friends are for the weak and lonely. Lia calls out to me several time but her voice is drowned out by the noise of the cafeteria. I find myself alone in the stairwell eating my food. Exactly as it should be. After I finish eating I get up to leave when the strange green haired girl comes from around the corner.

“Hey, pervert” she smiles and leans against the wall, blocking the doorway

“Get out my way, I’m not in the mood” I say walking still towards the door

As I get close enough she grabs me by the collar, pulls me down towards her face, and kisses me right on the lips. To avoid falling I had to put my hand on the wall behind her, making it look like a classic makeout scene.

“Leon, you forgot your bag” Lia comes from around the corner and stops dead in her tracks dropping my bag

“S-Sorry” she runs away

I manage to pull myself away from the green haired girl then walk over and pick up my bag.

“Not gonna chase after her? Not gonna get mad at me?” she squatted down in front of me, this time covering her panties, and questioned me

“Why should I? It’s not like we’re dating or anything” I recovered my bag and walked away the green haired girl clinged close to me.

As I turned the corner Lia’s friends were there I start to go around them but when they saw the green haired girl following me then both the redhead and blonde slapped me and the guy glared at me and told me I was disgusting.

“Friends of yours?” the green haired girl asked me

“No, not at all”
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Mar 9, 2015 7:24 AM #1323111
Welp I'm hooked, can't wait to read more it's very interesting.
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Mar 9, 2015 4:41 PM #1323280
Mediocre read. It's pretty cliche plot wise though, not really original, and the vocabulary is pretty simple for something meant to be an adult read. Also I feel that the action happened way too fast, there's a lot of stuff you could have described but you didn't. It feels a lot like a summary but with dialogue, really rushed. The bully's characters is also very stereotypical. I'd rate 4~5/10

Don't take it too harshly though I'm only trying to give cnc <3
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Mar 9, 2015 5:10 PM #1323287
I really appreciate the CnC thanks. I'll work on it, the plot will develop A LOT more
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Mar 9, 2015 10:29 PM #1323409
Ah I'd read this but as you stated : If this isn't my cup of tea then I shouldn't get started, and sadly it isn't my cup of tea ^^

But either way, I see you're involved in writing. While you're still new at it, with determination like this it won't be long before you see big improvement in your work, so keep it up :)
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Mar 10, 2015 1:13 AM #1323503
I feel so awkward posting here that I might need to post a dramatic gif to mark the occasion.
Hold on, I got infracted for that last time.
Anyhow, CC or whatever.

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Mar 10, 2015 1:34 AM #1323515
Chromium, that was some amazing CnC. Really appreciate it.
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Mar 13, 2015 6:53 PM #1325327
CHAPTER 1 ADDED. PLEASE ENJOY.
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Mar 18, 2015 12:30 AM #1327391
Gonna do the intro here, I'll attempt to do the first chapter another day, hopefully before the second one is up.

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May 14, 2015 11:51 PM #1361768
I'm back and I came with the gift of chapter 2. Please read and cnc.
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Jun 5, 2015 2:43 PM #1369886
CHAPTER THREE IS HERE.