Name : Jace Blake ( AKA Rogue )

Abilities :

-Extremely fast and agile
- Amazing reflexes and sense
- Decently Strong , ( because of his master Rude )
-can bend his soul into different weapons(only uses if he has to,)( can bend soul energy into different objects or things to like a parachute if he needs it)
- or just use's his soul to strengthen his punches (since his soul can form a kind of wisp around his hand and can give his punches a quarter of the power of a punch from Goku in Kaio-Ken)
- wears glove (not really an Ability)
- Soul attack / Soul wave( an attack that involves throwing a massive amount of soul energy at his opponent )
- can bend soul into a shield and use it because of his soul having a extremely high density.
- Soul link ,This allows him to Imagine any weapon or thing and make it out of soul energy , this ability is alot stronger when his been in contact with the thing recently, allows him to use soul radar which lets him sense souls / people nearby and gives him information on that soul ( like your name ) , also means he can connect his soul to you and take things out ( for example dark energy ) . He can take the energy out of anything with a soul for example a tree , it just has to be living ( which means he cant suck the energy out of a coffee table , no matter how convenient it is )

- Dark Soul Mode : Rogue can Attach his soul to the soul of anyone else or anything else and suck the dark force out of it and Adapt his own Soul to it
-While in this mode he is 10x faster and stronger ( in this state the very highest speed he can reach is about 250mph )
- Can use something called Dark Soul Wave where he shoots dark Soul energy from his body
- He goes EXTREMELY Crazy Aiming only to kill his opponents
-Eyes turn Pure Black , And Dark Aura Usually surrounds him
- Depending on how much Dark energy he gets from his opponent he can increase the amount of soul energy he can Produce .
- Can Create illusions while in Dark mode
- If he goes for more than 15 minutes he will be consumed by darkness and his figure will turn completely black and they only way he can turn back is by saying the word "Cheese" ( Which only his Clan Leader Deathinc / Vanquish now Radiation knows


Weaknesses :
- Can get extremely tired after using too much soul energy , for example an attack like Soul attack )
- Strength based opponents , since he is still 14 and even though he can fight is no master .
- Weapon masters( Rogue can summon weapons but he's only as good as any other person)
- Only uses Dark Soul mode When he has to in fear of killing his opponent
-Can only use for 15 minutes before he is corrupted by the dark energy[/B]

Appearance : Brownish Blondish hair , hair shape is like my user profile pic , but a little down , 5'8 ( tall ) , Brownish greenish eyes , somewhat tan skin , usually wears red hoodies and regular jeans,
sneakers , somewhat muscular , sharp chin and wears black leather gloves .

Personality : Smart , fun , relaxed , somewhat homebody , lets defeated opponents go , and hates bullies .

Story :

For a long time Rogue ( real name : Jace Blake) was bullied by upperclassmen at school and his brothers at home so he ran away. For three years he's been running away going around the world Causing trouble and and making a name for himself ( he's running is the reason he is extremely fast) . Soon people started calling him Rogue .he added '777' on himself since 7 and 3 is his two favorite numbers, though people just say Rogue . He got his powers after meeting a Guy named RuDe . RuDe was also a Rogue and an experienced one . RuDe Had a golden Handknuckle on his right hand and was a master fighter with god like Super Strength. He trained rogue in the Art of RHG fighting and at the end of Three months Challenged Rogue to All out fight for a Graduation test . Rogue was obviously Way too outmatched and at the brink of defeat found away to Bend his soul energy into a indestructible Sword . He Won and Graduated and RuDe told him to practice on using the ability he just gained. and so he joined RHG to hone and perfect his new found ability.

Demo : He ran . The robbers were chasing him , it was times like this that he regretted running away from home . It was night and he was on a side of town that had long since been abandoned . He was thinking of using his super speed to get away but that would be too easy . he ran into an alleyway . The three teenage robbers had surrounded him . they had bandannas and looked like they hadn't taken a shower in a while .They almost smelled like it to . He backed up a little more trying to think of what to summon up . The third one was the first to throw the punch , he threw well , you could tell he had some type of training .
Out of all of them he was the tallest and most muscular . Though that didn't mean anything , Rogue was faster than all of them combined . He just sidestepped and continued thinking about ways to take down these guys . The guy took this as cockiness and got mad . scowling and growling like a dog . He took something out his pocket . It glinted in the moonlight even though it was rusty and old . It was a knife . All of them started approaching him at once . That's when Jace knew it was time to get serious . He punched the first one hard in his stomach . As the air forced itself out of the boys stomach he bent over in agony and pain . Jace took this as an opening for an finisher and used his heel to send the boy flying into one of his accomplices . Then took his chance to run . He could have took out the last one but thought that would've been a waste of his time . Radiation, his clan leader ( for regular RHG ) decided he wanted to set curfew since Jace was supposedly coming home late too much . So Rogue ran realizing that it was already 10 o'clock .

Availibility : YAAAA!!!!!!!!!!!

Who names their kid Rogue?

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Who names their kid Rogue?

You'd be surprised with what kinda names people come up with for their kids nowadays.....

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Who names their kid Rogue?

His name is Jace Blake , Rogue is the name he is identified as as an runaway

Hi, Mind putting me on your hitlist. We could battle some time. Not now, but some time.

Here is my character.

AIGHT CHUMS LETS DO THIS!

I will be the first that gives actual CnC about the character. So lets go scientific all in this shit!

-The Whole Extremely High Density thing
If a body has the same density across its surface that makes him vulnerable because of internal structural weaknesses, its better if the outer shell is more dense but the inner one is more thin. That also might bring less usage of this "soul" you're talking about, which I will get to in a second. Or it can be viceversa: the more dense particles are on the inside, while the outer shell is less dense. This I suggest a lot for when he throws punches. Think at it as some sort of a glove.

-The Soul Link

Soul link , which is the thing that allows him to link his soul to anything in the world and create weapons at of his soul energy , also he can link it to his mind and create it like that , allows him to use soul radar which lets him sense souls / people nearby and gives him information on that soul ( like your name ) , also means he can connect his soul to you and take things out ( for example dark energy ) or put them in . Technically he can also mess with the form your soul even crush it , but that takes so much energy it can kill him . to use it he'd have to be in dark soul mode which he almost never goes into for the fear of killing his opponent

I don't even. Link his soul to his mind? Is that even possible? Like whot?!? Anyways...this has just a lot of flaws in the concept. The concept itself is good, but this is just really weird to read. And come on, gets information about the soul? Like no...that's kinda a bit too op.

-Dark Soul Mode

Dark Soul Mode : Rogue can Attach his soul to the soul of anyone else or anything else and suck the dark force out of it and Adapt his own Soul to it
-While in this mode he is 10x faster and stronger ( in this state the very highest speed he can reach is as fast or faster than the speed of sound and light

lol ok so:
Flaw nr.1: reaching speed of light and sound is physically impossible for a human being, even if it has such a mojo jojo array of powers. If a man were to run at that speed his body would catch fire around Mach 3, due to air attrition (A LEVEL PHYSICS SON!)
Flaw nr.2: what if the soul that he wants to attach to doesn't have dark force? maybe HE'S AN ANGEL! (Insert Supernatural Reference Here)
Flaw nr.3: adapting a soul to your own soul kinda doesn't make much sense, but meh.

"Cheese"

Im not even going to. Nope. Not a chance.

Soul suck . He can suck your soul into his , making you an souless and lifeless form ( AKA killing you ) . Though even in an form like dark soul mode something like this most likely kill him or give him some type of injury . Also if he survives the move he inherits some characteristics or abilities of the soul sucked person .

BRUH! NERF IRELIA MAN! Like this kinda goes over the board of "acceptable op-ness". Like he can KILL YOU and you can't do anything about it. And if he survives he even gets some abilities of yours. Like...at least add some sort of saving check for the opponent. Cause I can tell you this: people are not very happy when their character dies without permission.

And that's it for the scientific part

Now my thoughts about it.

-The concept is ok. Not too special, not too mainstream. But the character is definitely op in some aspects and weak in other aspects. I suggest you really find some balances. For example lets put this in sort of levels.

His early game is pretty bad. He can only conjure weapons, a shield and make his fists stronger. If he gets matched with an expert in fighting techniques, I don't see him lasting long if we compare the basic stats. (This is about how practical and fluid is writing a fight, don't misunderstand me)

His mid-late game is fuckin op cause he goes into black supersaiyan mode and wrecks everything. (Oh and speaking of which, its KAIO-KEN btw)

-Your writing technique definitely need some improvement, and no offense, but by the way you write you sound like an animator. Why? Cause the demo is a movie script :D

-Your spacing and organizing isn't the greatest either. I suggest you group your stuff together and you describe them (Ex. how does the Soul Link work? What weapons does it craft? Are there limitations? etc.) Also try keeping it clean and clear, so stuff like

Boredom ( Not really weakness )

I'd suggest avoiding it.

And I believe that's a wrap. I rate this Character 6/10 Teemos. Good Luck!

I don't have time to say anything in depth, but I just wanted to address one of Delor's points about killing each other's guys. That's actually totally fine, and that's quite literally been happening since the start. For example, when I first started out on FA, my guy got eaten twice and all if I recall right utterly brutalized once. There's really nothing wrong with it, just don't use it as cannon if your character dies, or if you don't want him to die in the first place, don't challenge people that will kill him.

EDIT: Alright, I saw speed of light, and I swear this is now like the third or fourth time I've seen that in someone's abilities, and I don't quite think anyone who says it fully understands what it means.

speed of light=
186,000 miles per second
1,116,000 miles per minute
66,960,000 miles per hour

To put the impact of the speed of light into perspective, a penny at that speed (weighing 3.11 grams) would have 208,245,600 grams times miles per hour, or 459,102.414 pounds times per mile per hour in American (335,137.302 kg times km per hour for everyone else). That's it's momentum.

For impact, let's be conservative and say that when you get hit by the penny. To get to this, that's force in newtons is equal to the momentum (In kg x m/s) divided by time. For the sake of showing my work, to get back to kg x m/s I have to multiply by 1,000, and then divide by 3,600. That's 93,093.695, and then because we're dividing by 1, it's also 93,093.695N. That's 20928.295 pounds of force, or again, for people who aren't American, 9,492.90719 kg of force.

Now, to put that in perspective, let's say you're driving a car that weights 4,000 pounds. To have that much momentum, it'd have to be driving at 114.775 miles per hours, or 184.1712 km per hour.

And again, that's a penny. A flying fist would be much more.

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AIGHT CHUMS LETS DO THIS!

I will be the first that gives actual CnC about the character. So lets go scientific all in this shit!

-The Whole Extremely High Density thing
If a body has the same density across its surface that makes him vulnerable because of internal structural weaknesses, its better if the outer shell is more dense but the inner one is more thin. That also might bring less usage of this "soul" you're talking about, which I will get to in a second. Or it can be viceversa: the more dense particles are on the inside, while the outer shell is less dense. This I suggest a lot for when he throws punches. Think at it as some sort of a glove.

-The Soul Link



I don't even. Link his soul to his mind? Is that even possible? Like whot?!? Anyways...this has just a lot of flaws in the concept. The concept itself is good, but this is just really weird to read. And come on, gets information about the soul? Like no...that's kinda a bit too op.

-Dark Soul Mode



lol ok so:
Flaw nr.1: reaching speed of light and sound is physically impossible for a human being, even if it has such a mojo jojo array of powers. If a man were to run at that speed his body would catch fire around Mach 3, due to air attrition (A LEVEL PHYSICS SON!)
Flaw nr.2: what if the soul that he wants to attach to doesn't have dark force? maybe HE'S AN ANGEL! (Insert Supernatural Reference Here)
Flaw nr.3: adapting a soul to your own soul kinda doesn't make much sense, but meh.



Im not even going to. Nope. Not a chance.



BRUH! NERF IRELIA MAN! Like this kinda goes over the board of "acceptable op-ness". Like he can KILL YOU and you can't do anything about it. And if he survives he even gets some abilities of yours. Like...at least add some sort of saving check for the opponent. Cause I can tell you this: people are not very happy when their character dies without permission.

And that's it for the scientific part

Now my thoughts about it.

-The concept is ok. Not too special, not too mainstream. But the character is definitely op in some aspects and weak in other aspects. I suggest you really find some balances. For example lets put this in sort of levels.

His early game is pretty bad. He can only conjure weapons, a shield and make his fists stronger. If he gets matched with an expert in fighting techniques, I don't see him lasting long if we compare the basic stats. (This is about how practical and fluid is writing a fight, don't misunderstand me)

His mid-late game is fuckin op cause he goes into black supersaiyan mode and wrecks everything. (Oh and speaking of which, its KAIO-KEN btw)

-Your writing technique definitely need some improvement, and no offense, but by the way you write you sound like an animator. Why? Cause the demo is a movie script :D

-Your spacing and organizing isn't the greatest either. I suggest you group your stuff together and you describe them (Ex. how does the Soul Link work? What weapons does it craft? Are there limitations? etc.) Also try keeping it clean and clear, so stuff like I'd suggest avoiding it.

And I believe that's a wrap. I rate this Character 6/10 Teemos. Good Luck!

I LOVE MY TEEMOS !!!! I am forever in your favor .JK .

Also fixed some stuff :
Less op
Goku thingy

Also he is not supposed to be that strong , even though someone did teach him some stuff he still is only a regular 14 year old he used to get bullied .
Secondly boredom is a weakness , i'm killed inside by it every day
Thirdly I love cheese , It's a very unhealthy relationship
Lastly its true it does kinda sound like a movie script :confused:

thanks for taking the time out your day for CNC !!!

@Crank i fixed it.

@ Everyone ... TEEEEEEEEMMMMMMOOSSSSSSSSSS!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

After a bit of thought I decided I want to challenge you to a battle. You have 48 hours (until Monday) to reply to the challenge. [Via PM Possibly]