Murphy Gray, the Light's Edge

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Mar 17, 2015 3:02 AM #1326875
Intro of StickOps Inc. (Click to Show)


wRHG Info thingy


Story (Click to Show)


Human Appearance (Click to Show)


Appearance for the book “Light and its Properties” (Click to Show)


Personality (Click to Show)


wRHG Ability and Weakness thingy


Abilities (Click to Show)


Weaknesses (Click to Show)


wRHG Demo thingy


Demo (Click to Show)


wRHG Battle log thingy


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Mar 17, 2015 3:26 AM #1326882
Your light form is OP, and what's to stop him from just going into it immediately and super flaring up? inb4 last-resort trump card attack
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Mar 17, 2015 3:43 AM #1326889
I agree with Waffles that there should be some kind of limitation attached to just entering that mode. Your weaknesses do balance out the abilities gained through that form somewhat, but teleportation is still a powerful ability.

Aside from that, no real complaints: your writing is solid, and I only noticed one spelling error in your first sentence. Best of luck to you, and I look forward to seeing your writing.
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Mar 17, 2015 5:02 AM #1326922
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Your light form is OP, and what's to stop him from just going into it immediately and super flaring up? inb4 last-resort trump card attack


I'm open for suggestions.
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Mar 17, 2015 5:09 AM #1326926
Remove all the powers and give him a walking stick.
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Mar 17, 2015 5:12 AM #1326927
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Remove all the powers and give him a walking stick.


DENIED.

Anyone else?
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Mar 17, 2015 5:19 AM #1326930
At least tell me why. It's not OP.
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Mar 17, 2015 5:20 AM #1326931
Why hello there, AAlbusUUmbra the 2nd.

Yes, you are potentially that OP. Because WWhite gave him self similar justifications prior to the great nerf.
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Mar 17, 2015 5:26 AM #1326936
My suggestions perfectly fit into Matthew's story. See...

Quote from Matthew Murphy
Murphy was an archaeologist and historian.


With the walking stick, it fits into his character perfectly and he doesn't need to be OP.
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Mar 17, 2015 5:37 AM #1326943
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My suggestions perfectly fit into Matthew's story. See...

He's 26 for God's sake!

Note:
Edited his teleportation skills. Any disagreements?
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Mar 17, 2015 5:42 AM #1326944
You can be 26 years old and have a walking stick. Don't discriminate against people with osteoporosis.
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Mar 17, 2015 6:06 AM #1326949
Agreeing with Hewitt, he needs a walking stick.
Or a cane.

Oh, and an eyepatch.
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Mar 17, 2015 7:47 AM #1326992
Then what? Turn into Captain Barbossa?
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Mar 17, 2015 8:08 AM #1327007
That's absurd.

Barbossa isn't an archeologist OR a historian.
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Mar 17, 2015 9:05 AM #1327031
Indiana Jones then?