WRHG Keron, The Moon of Hatred

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Mar 25, 2015 2:34 PM #1334403
Basic Info
Name: Nova Appario
Alias: Keron
Age: Unknown


Abilities
He can fly
He is immortal
He has abnormal strength/vitality he can get shot and can just walk it off
He can easily run up to 60 MPH, 80 MPH if he sprints
He fires a beam that can decimate anyone caught within the blast he takes a while to charge up and cool down (like an evil Kamehameha)


Weakness
While the beam is powerful it has a long cool down time, he can only use it once per fight
He is staggered for while after the beam is used so if it's dodged then he's defenseless
While his body is tough it can still be harmed, so if you throw a train at him he'll live but he'll be fucked up
Cutting of an arm or leg will be permanent and won't heal or grow back
Cutting off his head will disable him


History/Demo (Click to Show)



Personality
He is ruthless and attacks with ferocious accuracy. He is devious, crafty, and clever.


Appearance
He's 6 ft tall and weighs 198 lbs, his body is toned and muscular. His appearance changes whenever hes ready to fight his skin turns black and his eyes turn a dull red color he grows a tail and claws. Whenever hes not in fight mode his skin is a tanned white color, his eyes are a brighter red, and his hair is usually unkempt and messy. He usually doesn't wear a shirt but wears black skinny jeans and old bloodstained combat boots

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Mar 25, 2015 2:52 PM #1334406
Oh my, how preemptively rude of me (Click to Show)

Don't you dare try to make comparisons and justifications, Matthew, he's a different case compared to Murphy
Pardon the sudden feedback, I'm bored. I await your History/Demo...maybe after a good night's rest.
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Mar 25, 2015 4:40 PM #1334480
I WANNA CHANGE HIS NAME NOW >:|. I honestly added the beam because I wanted him to have a ranged attack (it also looks super cool the way i imagine it) because Nova didn't have one and i couldn't think of anything else. But my thing is most WRHG's are trained fighters to some extent so naturally their bodies would be tougher than a normal humans and also i didn't want to make the beam overpowered

Edit: I ended up changing everything about him lol.
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Mar 25, 2015 4:57 PM #1334486
The legend is here to stay!! I like your RHG dude, he seems very scary with his beam move tho. :)
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Mar 25, 2015 5:13 PM #1334493
As you so kindly requested, I'll give you an hour. Don't disappointed me ;3
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Mar 25, 2015 5:14 PM #1334494
Majora's Mask anybody?
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Mar 25, 2015 5:52 PM #1334512
boy i told u to name him pluto, He's da second in command not keron
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Mar 25, 2015 7:13 PM #1334548
demo added sorry it took so long. I have to deal with a lot of stuff daily.
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Mar 25, 2015 9:27 PM #1334735
Ruko? The very same from FA? Haha, nice to see you around again deary if it is you~

I'll probably come back really look into the character, but for now I wish you well~
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Mar 25, 2015 9:54 PM #1334751
Heh. The character looks good enough, though seems a tad bit OP if you ask me. I just have issues with the fact that he's a living tank that also has numerous means of mobility. To be fair I'm okay with everything but the teleporting seems like just that tad bit too much power in my opinion. There's nothing that really keeps him from teleporting all over the place, as there's no drawback to the ability either.

So yeah, he's tanky, strong, fast, can fly, BUT can teleport? I don't think your char is relatively dumb to back that up either, so that makes outsmarting him a difficult task. Again, he just seems a little bit too strong in my opinion (as most of the stronger characters that we have around can't seem to compete with him). It's your character, do whatever you want with him :). Just be careful not to overdo the strengths ;).

That's about it, don't expect any feedback on your writing style from me as there's people around that can provide you with more meaningful feedback than I can ^^.
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Mar 25, 2015 11:38 PM #1334798
Everything looks nice and simple but the only thing that bothered me was the flight / teleport combo.

I suggest that the teleport be nerfed to a few to several feet only. I mean, the guy can fly already. I'm sure the teleport is reserved for dodges and closing distances but you have the latter occupied by flight and the former slightly.

This way, your teleport can be justified as a dodge mechanic instead of a way to travel. Now with this comes the ability to spam the teleport, I'll leave it to you on how to limit the short distance teleport.

You don't need to follow my suggestion as you may find another way.
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Mar 26, 2015 1:35 PM #1335346
Got rid of the teleportation
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Mar 26, 2015 1:50 PM #1335368
Is your character some or of werewolf? You know, with claws, tails, black, 6ft tall, blood-shot eyes, and 'The Moon of Hatred' and stuff.

Hmm? :D
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Mar 26, 2015 9:44 PM #1335725
edit: hes da moon of hatred because name of clan is PLUTO so yeah
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Mar 26, 2015 10:22 PM #1335748
Well, your character is strong, but certainly not unbeatable. Good luck in your future endeavors ;3.