Name: Sydin


Abilities: Can shoot dark matter from a dimensional portal. These portal lead to the underworld and can be of different sizes and colors. Can open the same portal and suck people in to it. He uses a staff to do both. He can also teleport with the same portal.


Weakness: Sydin hates water. He cannot use his abilities will in water. Sydin also hates anyone who uses light as a weapon as it makes him cinfused and dizzy.


Story: Sydin is a demon who was summoned by a mage in the 1600's and has been living ever since.


Personality: Sydin is very sarcastic and cocky due to him being a demon and thinking that he is invincible. He is generally funny although he doesn't have many friends.


Appearance: Sydin is purple and has red eyes.He has long dark hair and wears a top hat. He usualy wears a trench coat. He always carries a staff with a sharp point at the end on his back.


Demo: Sydin sat at the small table for one a small McDonalds. He had just teleported in and was enjoying watching FBI agents pass by hunting for him. He pulled a news paper out of his jacket and started reading it.
"Mayor dead,blah blah blah,murder, police" Whispered under his breath.
He looked up at the TV. The reporter was talking about some FBI agents hunting for some guy for killing the mayor.
Sydin saw one of the people sitting and a table next to him look up, see him on the news, and look down at Sydin.
Sydin winked.
The man started yelling to the agents outside. They ran inside and Sydin stood up.
"Stop!" One of the agents said as all of them raised their guns.
Sydin tipped his hat and teleported to the door. He then walked in again behind the agents.
"Hey whats going on here?"
The agents all turned around aa Sydin opened a small portal above the agents. The agent's guns twitched before being completely ripped from the agent's hands and sucked in to the underworld.
"Lets do this" He whispered.
One agent rushed towards him. Sydin grabbed the agent's hand and pushed it back, throwing him off his balance. Sydin kicked the man in the back and shot a hole through him with his dark matter.
Two more rushed him and he hit one with his staff while side steping to avoid the other's punch. He shoved his staff through one of them and slammed one's head through a window.
He looked at the last one who was pulling out a baton. Sydin jumped in the air and slammed his staff down. The agent tried to block with his baton but it broke and the staff broke through his skull and split his in half.
Sydin walked up to the counter and asked the terrified cashier for 2 burgers. To go.


Battles: None yet.


Points:0/0/0/0

Anyone wanna battle?

Well hey there! One, I suggest you don't double post. The thread's new and fresh and you gotta give this place time to lay some comments your way! This forum's a bit less active than the animation RHG one, you know.

Anyway, no I won't like to fight (Busy with one right now!) but I'd like to give you a few character thoughts!


A big issue I find with this guy is that, well, he lacks specifics. This is a writing section! We can go into great detail about the littlest things, and you mention portals that can shoot out dark matter and seem to only suck in people, and without much explanation of what they look like, why they're limited to this, what's inside of them, etc? And the guy's a demon, an inhuman creature, yet his biological description is just "purple with red eyes"? Loads of stuff, mate! Be more specific!

The weakness seems to lack any real direct link with the power. I suggest maybe thinking up something that sounds like it works?

I mostly deal with powers and abilities when it comes to characters.

Thanks for the help dude!
Did you like the fighting demo of him? Anything you didn't like?

Sorry. I thought one didn't post.

Thanks for the help. Ill be on that!

Duude, really? The "Edit Post" button next to Reply!



See? Click that, silly.

As a general rule when making a character, you can't have enough detail. Think it could be more detailed? Then add more detail.
The more clear your powers are and the more descriptive they are, the more people will want to battle you and the less questions they ask you while doing so. I mean, you'll occasionally get questions just due to odd scenarios, like I asked a person if their character would hit on a metallic alien. But, for normal scenarios in a fight, you should have all bases covered.
Like, you portal ability might better sound as such (and I'm drawing assumptions of your ability as not all details are filled in. If I get something wrong about the ability then edit it into the ability description):
Portals: Sydin can create portals leading to the underworld. These portals allow for a variety of uses, such as unleashing bolts of energy. They can also create a vacuum effect, sucking all objects in a cone ten feet in front of it in. With his mastery over the portals, Sydin has learned to navigate the underworld through these portals, allowing him to go in one and come out the other.

Just an example, write it as you please.
Also, don't copy/paste it. Use your own creativity and language :P

I would fight you, but i have my own fights i'm engaging in soon. However, if you browsed the character's list, you should find several people who are available to challenge you.

Thanks!

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Story: Sydin is a demon who was summoned by a mage in the 1600's and has been living ever since.

Such story, much riveting. Wow.

Really, can you actually have a look through this character page and honestly tell yourself that yes, this is a solid character to work on? You have basically a demon who...does what? Kill people? For fun? Maybe so, but you didn't even state that. This is not the rhg written form. This is a place where you write a story that, yes, includes battles, but also requires certain amount of story to hook people in.

I can tell you right now that if one chuunibyou kid were to stroll down here and make a naruto clone with a tragic backstory he would have been better than you and placed more effort. Why? Because said character actually has a backstory, and when people talk to him, he'd at least have some canned lines about how he's the darkness to answer with. Your character, not so much. Probably ripping limbs off or talking about how he's a demon who...is a demon. Because that's apparently all you've thought of for him.

Come back when you actually sat down and thought of an actual character to write with. Better yet, start asking yourself if you really want to write or if you just wanted to join rhg but can' t animate, so you're doing wrhg because it's easier. because unless you have that sorted out, you shouldn't even bother trying to add description. You aren't nearly close to being ready to do that.

Fight meh

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Fight meh

I don't think this character was approved. Either way, Sydin hasn't been active in over a month (I think it was a month.) so he probably won't respond. Alternatively, Shadowolf claims he's always available. I think Digital boy and PuppyDogSucks are too. here are their wRHGs respectively.

http://forums.stickpage.com/showthread.php?95694-The-Shadowolf-(aka-Shado-or-Maxar)
http://forums.stickpage.com/showthread.php?96109-WRHG-Character-Vice-The-Volt-Infector
http://forums.stickpage.com/showthread.php?95585-Darius-Benson-The-Kingsman

Would anyone pleeeease do a battle with me

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Would anyone pleeeease do a battle with me

Refer to my above post. I'd do it myself, but I have other stuff to do. Also, you want to PM them the challenge.