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Sep 23, 2015 5:29 PM #1405255
Greeting readers and writers, and welcome to what is (pointed out to not be) the first player v. clan battle recorded on the wRHG (or at least to most people's knowledge it is). I myself had issued a challenge to the Blade Mercenaries, at the time only consisting of Haru, Chaotic_Penguin and PitchEnder to bring a bit of a spin to the otherwise traditional battle formula of the wRHG. I could go into depth as to why this took many times longer than expected, but that is not really relevant, what is, is that it's finally here.

Important to note is that officially this battle is a SPAR. Due to what happened with one of their former members, Shadowolf, I have proposed to turn the battle into a spar in case they had lost their spirits. They picked up my offer, and thus no official points will be handed out for this battle (sorry voters!). We, and in particular the Blade Mercenaries, would still appreciate your CnC though! But most importantly, we sincerely hope that you'll enjoy!

Without further ado, here are the fighters :

Vern's 'Agent Gamma'

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The Blade Mercenaries :
-Haru's 'Kiro Sarr' (Leader)
-Chaotic_Penguin's 'Deam Catena' (Co-leader)
-Shadowolf's 'Maxar | Shadowolf' (BANNED)
(Apparently Shado's original character profile got torn down together with his account. Luckily for those who haven't read it, I had taken a copy of it with me in a word dox so that I could work on the story while on my travels. The story and demo have not been incorporated, however).

And here are their battles :

The Blade Mercenaries

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e broke the silence in the dimly lit room. As Beethoven went into another repeat of the opening staffs of Fur Elise, The Shadowolf snatched the worn plastic handheld off of its base.
“You know who this is if you have the right number. If not, you will want to hang up.”
A voice that would not have sounded out of place coming from a cobra oozed out of the speaker and into Shado’s pricked up ears.
“Oh indeed I do know. It just so happens that I have a job for you.”
“‘You’ as in me personally, or ‘you’ as in all of us?”
“I think the entire Blade Mercenaries group will need to take out this target.”
Shado tilted his head so that the phone was pressed between his right shoulder and his ear. He snatched up a beige note-pad bearing the “Staybridge Suites” logo on it, along with a blue and white “Mat-Su Credit Union” pushpen. Readying himself to write down the info, he started to ask the standard questions.
“Name of target please.”
“Agent Gamma of the Organization.”
“Suspected location.”
“Westlands suburbs district. Outside of RHG City.”
“Can you be more specific?”
“I’m afraid not, although I can say that he was supposedly caught on camera at Lorenzo’s Deli and Market on Jackson Street East at 2:31 PM yesterday.”
Rather precise information, Shado thought. “That will be enough for us to work with. Now, what’s the bounty you are paying.”
“Considering how important you will be to me, I thought that ten million would be suffice.”
“I will presume you meant ten million apiece.”
“No, I --”
“Then there is no need for you to have called. There will be three people working on this, and thus there needs to be three paychecks. You did not even choose a price that could be divided three ways. Either reconsider immediately, or you will need to find another set of mercs.”
“Wait! Fine. Thirty million it is.”
“Good. Thank you for your patronage. Agent Gamma will be dead within the week, probably sooner. You will receive an automated message from a computer generated number when the job is done. Goodbye.”
Setting down the pen and hanging up the phone, Shado turned to his recently acquired companions. The apartment consisted of little more than a bedroom with two double beds, a bathroom, and an eat-in kitchen. They would need to find larger quarters sooner or later, but the anonymity provided by this location was not easy to come by, and the lack of three beds did not bother Shado. He had slept through blizzards in mountain crags, so an outdated mauve shag carpet made a fine enough bed for him. Catena was browsing the refrigerator aimlessly, while Kiro Starr lounged on his bed, tapping his foot to the beat of one of his seemingly endless supply of songs. Raising his voice slightly to make sure Kiro would hear him over the headphones, Shado announced, “We have a new target. Full force attack, on our part. Going after a person by the name of…” He glanced at the pad. “Agent Gamma. Works for something called the Organization.

“Ugh. I hope he’s not related to that Omega guy.” Catena grumbled. “Where is this… Gamma located at?” She continued. “Jackson street East is the last place he was seen” declared Shado. Catena’s mind drifted as she imagined all the great foods that could be purchased there. “What’s the reward?” Shado grinned. “Managed to get us 10 million each.” Catena spun around, startled. “T-t-ten million?!” Catena had not eaten too well in the last few days, and the thought of suddenly being a millionaire excited her. “Kiro did you hear that? 10 million! 10 million!” She proclaimed. Shado stood there, still grinning at her excitement. Kiro opened one eye, and mumbled, “Say that again?”

“Ten Million, you idiot!” Kiro sat up, now mildly interested. “Well, I guess that is more than what we usually get.” Catena was confounded. “Why are you so unusually calm? It is Ten Million Bucks!” Kiro laughed, and then held a grin. “Of course I am happy! Imagine all the songs I can buy!” Kiro stopped grinning. “Of course, 10 million probably means that the target will be very dangerous. We don’t know what to expect, so be on your guard.” Catena was too busy thinking of all the food she would eat to listen.

Shado stretched, flexing his clawed hands. “Well, I’m not particularly in need of money, myself. It’s the principle of the thing. Anyhow, I’ve been needing a good fight. The big problem is that we don’t know where he lives. I’ll need to be your ‘point-man’ considering the fact that I can sniff out his trail from the Deli. You guys are a lot better at blending in than me, so it will be up to you to do the surprise attack.”

“Alright.” Kiro glanced at Catena. “Anything you want to say?”

“We go now. Gather your… whatever. We’ll bring this guy down.” Shado and Kiro looked at her curiously. Usually she is calm and tactical, always wanting to know more about the target. “What are you staring at me for? Let’s get going!” She slammed the refrigerator shut and leaped out the window. “We’ll strategize on the way there!”

“Strange,” Kiro thought. “She must be rushing for the money… But oh well.” Grabbing his trusty shotgun, Cecile, off the bed, he walked towards the door. “Hope she didn’t break a leg, jumping out of that window,” Kiro jokingly murmured to Shado.

Shado nodded his agreement, following her lead out of the window. “The bigger thing is if she breaks her caution. I didn’t like the feeling I got from our caller. I can’t put my finger on it, though...I’ll probably wake up in the middle of the night with it.” He shot a steel pole up to Kiro. “Slide down, fireman style, since apparently no one here is civilized enough to use the door.”

“Hmm?” Kiro turned. “Oh, a fireman pole! That’s nice, even though it brings back old memories…I’ll use it.” He started to slowly slide down the slippery pole. “Thanks.”
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“Ok, here’s the jist of the battle. We know nothing of the target, but we know we’ll be fighting in the city, so I’ll make a little arena so we can reduce collateral damage. I’ll take some time to make sure this Gamma guy doesn’t escape. I’ll jump in to try to pin him down, then you two can pound down on him. Let’s do this quick, clean, and easy.” Shado and Kiro nodded as the trio sprinted toward the city. “Stay on the comms, we’ll split up to find him.”

As Kiro ran, for some reason, he suddenly was a bit worried. “I have a feeling that not researching this guy is going to prove to be our downfall.. Oh well.” He put on his headphones, and played some music to clear his mind. It also doubled as a disguise so people looking at him would see a regular young man with a music device, like ones they usually see around the city. He hid Cecile
for now in his backpack.

Catena, though taking advantage of a nearby ice-cream parlor, kept watch outside the deli while Shado browsed around the store. Though the door to the back office was locked, he merely melted bolt and strolled in. A set of security monitors were arrayed in front of him. Reaching up to the earbud he was wearing, he tapped it once and spoke softly. “Testing BM closed circuit radio system. All members online?” A cough from Catena and a bar of “Another One Bites the Dust” whistled by Kiro gave him the affirmative.

Setting about his work, he began scrolling through the video history until he reached the appropriate date stamp in the bottom right corner. Several people were in the Deli. Assuming the target was not a geriatric black lady or a “soccer-mom” wrangling three elementary school kids, no one was inside. Outside the front window, however, the camera caught a relatively non-descript white man with neatly trimmed brown hair and beard. He stood at the window for a short time, presumably deciding if he wanted to go in or not, then continued walking down the sidewalk. Shado furrowed his brow. Something isn’t right about this… Rewinding the film, he played it over again, in slow motion. A sly, predatory grin tugged at the corners of his lips. Why you little devil. Couldn’t outsmart old Maxar, could you?

Shado jumped at the sound of the balding manager tromping his way towards the Big Mac sitting on the corner of the desk. Hurriedly, he melted the bottom cans in a stack of Bush’s Original Baked Beans. The man sighed, scratched irritatedly at what little red hair he had left, and stomped to the shelves on aisle three to clean up the fallen cans. Dashing out of the store, Shado stopped several feet away from Catena at the spot where Agent Gamma had stood. Several minutes of sniffing brought up the scent he was looking for. Young caucasian male, faux leather, black wax shoe polish. He tapped the intercom again. “Target’s trail acquired, video identification made. White male with brown hair and beard, grey eyes. Tidy in appearance. I’m going to track him down. Guys, I need you to be careful. I have suspicions that we are getting ready to spring a trap...on ourselves. On the video, Agent Gamma stood at the window from 2:31:00 to 2:31:59, precisely the time that our contact told us he was there, and no longer. Also, when he first arrived, he glanced towards the camera, then adjusted his position for a better camera angle. Lastly, I don’t smell a man at ease...his scent give every indication of one who was anticipating combat, though not anxious of any immediate threat. This is Shado, out.” Without waiting for their response, he began to walk down the sidewalk like any normal person. No one would have noticed his nose working furiously underneath the shadow of his hood.

Catena took heed in Shado’s warning, but nonetheless stood relaxed outside the deli. She watched carefully as each person walked by, all the while mindlessly licking her ice cream. Grey eyes? That’s peculiar. Still, it’s gonna take a while to find this Gamma guy in this crowd.
“Shado, catch sight of him yet?” Catena mumbled. “It’s hard to spot out this agent in such a large crowd.” She continued, munching on her sugarcone.
“Could you not eat and speak at the same time? Also, I think I may be close.” Shado replied.

Hearing the chatter between them, Kiro jumped in while he was walking in a abandoned street.
Something didn’t seem right about this place… and it personally gave him the creeps. He talked into his intercom, unaware of the shadow creeping up on him.

“Not really finding a place to fight… We might have to-Mmph!” Kiro suddenly was put in a tight choke-hold from behind. Struggling to breathe and gasping for air, he tried to throw him off, but the man seemed to have a iron grip. Summoning all his remaining strength, he threw a desperate
back kick into the man’s chest. He heard a “OOMPH!” and saw the man stagger back, releasing the grip and momentarily hindered as Kiro sucked in as much precious air as he could.

Shado was immediately in alert. “Kiro, are you there?! Are you in combat with our target, or with another person?!” He quickly followed up with a page to Catena. “I need you to get over to…” he hurriedly checked the triangulation function on the radio in his pocket “the next street over. Safton Lane, first alley on the right. Kiro needs back up, but I’m not leaving this scent trail yet. GO!”

Catena sprinted towards Safton Lane, zigzagging through the crowds. A chain link began to multiply in her pocket, until she was covered in chainmail. Many eyes glanced toward her, until one exclaimed, “Run! She’s one of the RHG! There’s gonna be a fight!” The civilians lost control, screaming and scrambling for their lives. “Shado, I think we got rid of all possible civilian casualties already.” Catena said. By now she was gliding effortlessly at max speed.

Kiro quickly rolled behind a large box labeled “CAUTION: ITEMS FRAGILE.” Quickly taking out
Cecile, he jumped over and.. the man was gone! “W-Where did he go! He just vanished like a puff of smoke!” Slowly moving around the area, he kept Cecile at the ready. Sweat slowly trickled down his face. “What did we get into?” A sharp blow from behind sent him into pure darkness for a moment. Then, he woke up.

By the time she arrived at the alley, Kiro was collapsed in a corner. “What happened?” She asked. “H-He, He just… just disappeared! And then, out of nowhere, he struck me from behind.” Kiro answered. “Shado, we need to be more cautious. This Gamma guy is fast, and he’s trying to incapacitate us. Are you sure his trail doesn’t lead here?” Catena lifted Kiro up, and slung his hand over her shoulder. “Come on, let’s go find Shado.”

“Guys, use the ‘Locate’ function on the radio pods in your pockets to find me. I think I’m getting warm...something tells me there is a trick being played on us. Whoever attacked you is going to be after me next, of that I’m sure. It’s best that we stick together from now on.” Shado wound his way through the now abandoned streets. “Door Open” alarms beeped from the vehicles hastily
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Sep 23, 2015 8:40 PM #1405278
I just read the Mercenaries' part. Really liked it^^
However I do have one question. Who killed Shado now, Gamma or my Character? (In our wRHG battle)
It does not quite make sense if your clan and my Character both have their own story about Shado's death, especially because it is likely that we are going to refer to it in our future works.
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Sep 23, 2015 9:34 PM #1405288
Quote from roBEAT
I just read the Mercenaries' part. Really liked it^^
However I do have one question. Who killed Shado now, Gamma or my Character? (In our wRHG battle)
It does not quite make sense if your clan and my Character both have their own story about Shado's death, especially because it is likely that we are going to refer to it in our future works.


If you're yet to read my part, then please do so. I know the length may be intimidating but I do hope you'll like it.

When it comes to canon-wise, I highly doubt Shado would have been able to survive either encounter with Gamma, and personally I think it's more befitting to the character to pass away in the presence of his clanmembers, so they already have that covered and need not waste time on someone no longer worth investing time in (EG : By making a reaction story because your version was seen as canon). Haru and Chaotic stated that they doubted they'd be able to take me on (I'm yet to be the judge of that, but it's a spar now anyways) so when it comes to that I guess I'll have to dictate his fate canon-wise. I'll read both of your battles and then appropriately judge which one I myself would like most to be the canon, you're free to throw in your own opinion as well though, I mean I'm not entitled to be the absolute judge of another person's character anyways.
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Sep 23, 2015 10:37 PM #1405297
Well, I can say this was entertaining.
Great job, Fern. Kiro got rekt really hard, but that is alright with me.
I'm guessing you wrote the story before his overhaul, correct?

But anyway, we probably didn't stand a chance if we went for a vote.
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Sep 23, 2015 11:47 PM #1405311
Alright I read your battle, and gosh the first half is really neat! Had good solid atmosphere, it was decently written and you could really feel the Blade Mercenaries' energy, how they were pumped to do this even though something seemed off. Good job there as a team! As the battle progressed, though, things got a bit more cluttered and messy. I suppose that happens, I can't really say I'm all that glad with my ending either, but alas. I am a bit confused as to what the dude with super-fists is doing there, and a bit disappointed by Gamma's lackluster aim, but you nevertheless made it a quite neat battle.

There's still some things that felt really off though. I mean you can pretty much tell when Shado dropped off, but you guys still did way better than I had first anticipated. The things bothering me the most are the plain, flat reactions though. I guess Kiro and Catena weren't really that close to Shado but you'd still think they'd be saddened over the loss instead of just being like "Oh he died". Same goes for the money thing. I can imagine it being quite shitty if you just had one of your guys killed over nothing, but Catena and Kiro pretty much shrug it off : I.

Also I appreciate you not going into detail on how you killed my precious little Gamma, but then again that feels like a cheap ending to me. (this coming from the guy who brutally massacred all three of your characters) While Kiro, Catena and Shado felt well-illustrated, I can't really say the same for Gamma though. (on that matter, how do you feel about my own depiction of your characters? Are you pleased, or rather peeved?) He's antagonized constantly and feels a bit written off as a cheap bad guy while there's really a lot more to him than just being a killing machine. I mean I guess you'd need the entire backstory for an accurate depiction, which you ofcourse don't have, but most important thing to note about him is that he kills because he has to, not particularly because he wants to. He's okay with killing but he's only really concerned about bringing the mission to a successful end.

But the main reason I feel as if he's being illustrated as a cheap bad guy is because of the fact that he had multiple opportunities to take you out, but didn't. I don't mind missed shots. With pinpoint accuracy, guns are toxic for a writer in that regard anyways. What I do mind is the fact that it feels as if Gamma let countless opportunities go to waste, but then again I guess you can't keep on dragging the story forever (*looks at his own length*) so all in all it's still okay. Just feel as if he felt a bit underwhelming up close (you can make him miss his guns NP, but in hand to hand combat he can fuck you up in seconds).

I'll be doing a more detailed CnC on the writing itself later (if you want to you could point out the parts that aren't Shado's and I'll focus on those instead). But for now, know that you still did really well and outlived my expectations, and that I hope that you'll start writing on a more consistent basis now :) (And yes I used the pre-overhaul one)

Also yes, Kiro got rekt really hard, but that's simply because in my screenwriting logic Gamma just entirely eclipses Kiro in almost every aspect, and thus there's little I can have Kiro do to give him some good screentime other than having him die really graphically. Catena stood more of a chance not only because she had way more versatility, but because her raw power is enough to overpower Gamma. Originally I just wentt full lame-ass on everything and had everyone just die really graphically without having put up a fight, but after taking way too many looks I've actually grown a bit displeased of the work. Catena initially only walked up to Kiro before Gamma just painted the walkway with the insides of her head (yeah... sorry Chaotic). But frankly I like Catena and she's brave and stubborn enough to stand up even against impending death, so I left her semi-alive.

And Shado, well, call me lazy but if I were to use my own screenwriting logic for a battle with Shado there's simply nothing I could've made that made sense. Shado literally rapes Gamma, the wolf counters all of his strengths, and easily capitalizes on Gamma's weaknesses with his own strengths. Realistic fight progression is important to me, and I couldn't really find a lot of good ways to have an epic Shado v. Gamma fight, let alone a 1v3 with Shado (and Catena!) in it.

So yeah, nicely done, you can be proud of what you've already made. After all, what's the use of going any further down the road if you're not happy with the distance you've already traveled? :)

Good luck guys.
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Sep 24, 2015 12:58 AM #1405342
Alrights, I'll do some thinking into the story.
What I was displeased most, agreeing with you, was the ending. Looking over it, it seemed a bit.... sloppy, to say the least.
I have no idea why I did not change it. Eating KFC does not match learning about Shado's death.
We probably could've gone longer, but I think we wanted to end it after multiple time spans of no work.
I am happy to gain your approval on the first part, however. I actually think this was the best thing I ever wrote/semi-wrote.
I'll wait for Chaotic to see this.
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Sep 24, 2015 1:04 AM #1405343
You and Chaotic should really consider getting Skype accounts or some other so that you can communicate things like this more rapidly and efficiently.
There's an ulterior motive to this suggestion, if I like you enough you'll find out what it is :P
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Sep 24, 2015 1:06 AM #1405347
I was going to do a wRHG vs clan when my new Gladiator was finished ;-; too bad ya beat me to it

Don't really have time to read the brawl right now, but I look forward to doin so right when I get home
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Sep 24, 2015 1:54 AM #1405354
Whooooo! It's out!

Going to answer some questions first: Shado was killed by Gamma. Also now that I think about it, I should've added something at the end like "Both members hid their feelings. Not only did a close friend died, but he died for nothing as well." or something. Then again, I was in the "Screw this guy, he died. Ok." cause I wrote it right after he was found multi-ing.

Going to do CnC later. For Vern, of course.

MALACAL TELL ME.

I do have skype though.
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Sep 24, 2015 1:56 AM #1405356
Okay, all I have to say is that vern's story was beyond amazing. I feel a lot better about the loss I took. I actually don't have any critique for Vern and I don't have anything to say that Vern didn't cover for the Blade Mercenaries' version. Although I do want to know. Who sent them after Vern in his version?
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Sep 24, 2015 3:38 AM #1405366
Quote from Urako
Okay, all I have to say is that vern's story was beyond amazing. I feel a lot better about the loss I took. I actually don't have any critique for Vern and I don't have anything to say that Vern didn't cover for the Blade Mercenaries' version. Although I do want to know. Who sent them after Vern in his version?


Hey now, don't get ahead of yourself.
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Sep 24, 2015 4:15 PM #1405440
Although I am pretty sure Azure was the first to issue this kind of battle [Azure had a battle with ArcaSanctorum once if I remember correctly], but it was never posted, I am glad this kind of things happen :)

I will post my comments later since it is kind of late where I am. Nice to see the battles are still active here.
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Sep 24, 2015 4:31 PM #1405442
This 1v4+ ain't the first and won't definitely be the last.

Pretty impressive work from both sides, the Blades actually put effort into hauling something together.
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Sep 24, 2015 5:10 PM #1405447
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Going to answer some questions first: Shado was killed by Gamma.


I don't think we'll have to dig any deeper than that frankly. Canon-wise Shado's simply been killed by Gamma, and you can choose whatever version you like more anyways since nobody would be able to tell how exactly he went out anyways.

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Then again, I was in the "Screw this guy, he died. Ok." cause I wrote it right after he was found multi-ing.


Try not to have your personal feeling towards your opposing writer seep into your wRHG battles. We all were pissed off at Shado that day but storywise he was still your friend. Though, I guess in the moment you could forget to take that into consideration, in that case best tip is to just keep yourself from writing if you're feeling too emotionally clouded.

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Okay, all I have to say is that vern's story was beyond amazing.


Thanksies < 3

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Who sent them after Vern in his version?


Find out next time in Dragon Ball Z!

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I am glad this kind of things happen


I'm glad to see you're still around and reading my battles too ^v^

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This 1v4+ ain't the first and won't definitely be the last.


Wasn't aware, regardless the mistake has been "fixed" ;)
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Sep 25, 2015 2:43 AM #1405497
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Try not to have your personal feeling towards your opposing writer seep into your wRHG battles. We all were pissed off at Shado that day but storywise he was still your friend. Though, I guess in the moment you could forget to take that into consideration, in that case best tip is to just keep yourself from writing if you're feeling too emotionally clouded.




I thought you were finished and therefore didn't want to keep you waiting. Turns out you actually finished after us XD.
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