Olivia Taint - Clay Beast-Tamer

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Jan 13, 2016 3:52 PM #1430413
Olivia Taint
Clay-Beast Tamer

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Abilities (Click to Show)


Weaknesses (Click to Show)


About the Beasts (Click to Show)


Appearance (Click to Show)


Personality (Click to Show)


Story (Click to Show)


DEMO(s) (Click to Show)


Battles:
0/0/0/0

Hitlist (Click to Show)

(I'm very sorry for the messy formatting. I'm still playing around with a few things trying to figure out how to work everything here.. I'm also currently working on a demo, and will be trying to make this page look prettier so that when I upload my demo, the whole page will look nice.. Sorry for the inconvenience.)
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Jan 13, 2016 4:23 PM #1430417
I'm smelling an army v army. Add Dex Omni to that hitlist if you would please :D
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Jan 13, 2016 4:45 PM #1430420
Cool character, welcome to the community. You should add a list of what animals she can summon in a spoiler to help people who want to battle you. You do spoiler by [.spoiler=title] [./spoiler] just get rid of the periods. Can't wait to see your demo.
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Jan 13, 2016 4:54 PM #1430423
You've got a pretty good character design so far. Good enough to put you on my hitlist!

The only issue that might come up with your character though is the beasts. Unless you specify which beasts she tends to take into battle or limit how many kinds of beasts Olivia can make, this ability could be considered a toolbox, which makes it difficult for others to write your character. I remember there was a post talking about this somewhere but I forgot where it was... :/
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Jan 13, 2016 4:57 PM #1430424
Cool character you got here. I like the concept behind her abilities.
Add Levi to that hitlist, he's in my signature... ;)
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Jan 13, 2016 5:56 PM #1430429
Quote from ayamketimun
You've got a pretty good character design so far. Good enough to put you on my hitlist!

The only issue that might come up with your character though is the beasts. Unless you specify which beasts she tends to take into battle or limit how many kinds of beasts Olivia can make, this ability could be considered a toolbox, which makes it difficult for others to write your character. I remember there was a post talking about this somewhere but I forgot where it was... :/


Oh! I'll try and clean that up a bit.
It was meant more to give the other writer a sense of freedom when writing with Olivia, but I see what you mean!
Thank you very much!
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Jan 13, 2016 10:48 PM #1430463
Whoa, did the character get deleted on accident somehow?
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Jan 14, 2016 12:06 AM #1430476
It was probubly edited and is pending approval. Stay cool, it'll be back
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Jan 14, 2016 9:02 AM #1430583
Is it deleted or something?
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Jan 14, 2016 2:35 PM #1430605
Oh dear.
Should I try deleting this thread and posting a new one..?

EDIT:
Oops. I don't think I can delete.. What should I do..?
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Jan 14, 2016 3:08 PM #1430609
Just PM a mod, your edit is probubly just pending approval

EDIT: That's also why there are 11 posts but only 10 showing. It's still there, just needs the green light.

EDIT II: There it is!

EDIT III: Interesting character! I do agree that beasts should be specified, even battle to battle, butnthere should be a general set of what to expect that includes everything. Also, does amount of water affect size? I know it did with some toys when I was a kid, but I wasn't sure if it was more less activated by the water, or if it did soak it in like a sponge.

EDIT IV: Also, a demo would help gage your character, amung other things
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Jan 14, 2016 11:56 PM #1430690
Ah, I think I know what caused it's disappearance.
As part of the war on spambots, anybody who puts a link in their post and has under 50 posts will have their post turn invisible until approved.
Or something like that. Still, wait a little while before putting links into your page.

I do think the character is pretty neat, although I do think the personality section could be a bit more developed. otherwise I have no gripes.
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Jan 15, 2016 2:20 AM #1430720
Okay, added an "About the Beasts" section that goes further in depth about Olivia's creatures.

I'll work on personality and appearance a bit more now.

Thank you all for the current feedback! I will get my demo finished as soon as possible!