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John Moore the Demon,Angel and Human

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Jan 18, 2016 1:12 PM #1431427
Full Name:John Moore
Age:Unknown.Though his appearance takes the shape of a 23 year old.

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Personality:John is an agnostic,yeah,yeah he might believe in angels and demons and other supernatural beings,but he does not believe there is some sole God out there somewhere.John is also rather alone most of the time and though it doesn't really look like it,he actually is a kind person once you get to know him.John has a soft side towards people who are being tracked down.Oh yeah, almost forgot he is never really impressed and he does not smile often.

Appearance:Though John was raised from with viking heritage he looks more of an American than a Scottish viking.He also has brown hair and has green irises, he also typically wears a dark green cloak when going out into the streets of RHG City.Underneath his Cloak though is Plate armor made from the same substance as his rapier and he also wears military boots.(Note: I forgot to put his height so here it is: 5'6)

Weaknesses:Angelic Mode weaknesses:
Angelic field:Angelic field may be able to deflect magical attacks but not attacks from swords,arrows etc.
Änglalik hastighet: This will greatly effect his stamina
Battle:Angelic mode is not fit in battling with mortals.Vulnerable to fire
Demonic Mode weaknesses:
Demonic Field:The opposite of Angelic fields weakness.
Viaggio ombra: Takes a lot of effort to do this and energy/stamina
Battle:Is not fit against magical enemies also this mode might be powerful but it is not something you would call fast.
Normal weaknesses:
Johns body is not meant to be attacked by highly heated projectiles such as plasma,fire,lasers and etc.
John may have a great strength,speed,intellect and etc but he can't fight a long drawn out battle.

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Points:0/0/1

Availability:Available

Hitlist
1 Organization:Six
2 Ignusburns: Levi
3 TheChosenGamer: Maguma Child of the earth
4 Xate:Lucario the blue brawler
5 Sorrowfulrage: Dezi
6 Narcotix: Olivia Taint the clay beast tamer
7 Kamiroo Wolf: Dex Omni





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Jan 18, 2016 3:31 PM #1431448
Story and lore criticism:
If it's currently 2015 AD...wouldn't 9891 AD be HELLA far in the future?

Also, I think your history may need some work if you meant he was raised by vikings 9891 years BEFORE CHRIST '-' You might want to look them up to be sure.

But who knows? Perhaps all civilisation has fallen in the distant(extremely distant) years following 2016, and Vikings have risen back to power. Would be a nice twist, but you're gonna need to change so much xD.

I like almost everything else. Haven't read the full demo but you might wanna, y' know, s p a c e things out a bit? A block of text is really daunting and can turn a lot of people off your story.
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Abilities/equipment/whatever you bring to the gun fight:

I love em! Great thematic you've got here! Not OP in the slightest as far as I'm concerned.
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All in all, your wRHG is a tad rough around the edges but it's certainly passable with a few changes to the story/background! Just get your dates right and work on some grammatical issues(which honestly aren't that big an issue), and you'll be ready for battle!

Edit: DONT FORGET TO ADD A SECTION THAT STATES WHETHER OR NOT YOU'RE AVAILABLE! FOR COMBAT!
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Jan 18, 2016 8:13 PM #1431487
I kind of like him! The idea, while a little cliché, is pretty cool.
I like the variations of his abilities, especially the Angelic/Demonic shields. I liked that quite a bit.

I have one major question though..
When using "Pioggia di coltelli", what are the knives made of? Are they made of some form of energy, or are they actual knives that have just been enhanced? If the latter, where do they come from?

On one last note, if you'd like to have a battle/spar some time, let me know! In other words, add me to your hitlist!
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Jan 18, 2016 11:24 PM #1431530
Cool character man! I've always liked the demon characters, but this one, being part angel too, sells it for me, I like him!
Like Wolf said above, you might want to space some stuff out in the demo. As well as edit and smooth out some sections, once you do that, add me to that hitli-
Wait a minute...
You already did...
You sir...
Are on top of things...
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Jan 19, 2016 7:54 AM #1431725
Question
Are you Italian?
'Cause I am :D
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Jan 19, 2016 9:11 AM #1431745
Kamiroo wolf,actually there the time line is actually supposed to be 981 ad not 9891 ad I accidentally added the other 9 so yeah and DiPi no I am not Italian but I do study the Italian language when I have some free time also Narcotix yes the knives are made out of some magical energy
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Jan 19, 2016 9:14 AM #1431747
The timeline was supposed to be 981 ad not 9891 ad I am sorry for my mistake
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