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Jul 20, 2016 6:01 AM #1454971
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Oi, Kamiroo. I hope you have no problem with me having mentioned Sanctuary in my part of the Clan War.

Easier to ask forgiveness than permission huh?
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Jul 20, 2016 8:02 AM #1454981
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Oi, Kamiroo. I hope you have no problem with me having mentioned Sanctuary in my part of the Clan War.


Hope you can forgive me for not reading it.

I've been meaning to, but the amount of sloth in my being is absolutely staggering. Like, seriously.

I'm sure I won't have a problem(nothing I could do if I did, lol).
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Jul 21, 2016 7:54 PM #1455201
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Hope you can forgive me for not reading it.

I've been meaning to, but the amount of sloth in my being is absolutely staggering. Like, seriously.

I'm sure I won't have a problem(nothing I could do if I did, lol).


D'aw. Kam. I'll pick the passage out for ya. It's only a few lines when you separate it out.

And if anything does seem off- whether it's with this story or any other- it doesn't matter what stage we're at- we'll totally do what we can to work around it! The goal is to make a story that everyone can enjoy, and if we can do a better job with that, then we'll happily find a way to!

If you want a summary, Dante just shot Sencarn a quick phonecall to let him know what the deal was with Nehushtan. 6 lines of dialogue, 3 sentences exposition. Not a huge thing.

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Jul 21, 2016 8:54 PM #1455211
So, Zackeroar has finished his first ACR. :) CnC please?

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Jul 21, 2016 9:24 PM #1455214
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So, Zackeroar has finished his first ACR. :) CnC please?

David vs Goliath (Click to Show)


I didn't notice much aside from a tendency to "overuse"(you didn't really, but some words could have been substituted for others in places imho) words in certain areas of the story and some common errors.

"Ringed" Should be rang, for example.

Other than that, splendid work! I might take a target for myself.

Double edit: XDHunterNest's ACR results now on the OP ;D

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D'aw. Kam. I'll pick the passage out for ya. It's only a few lines when you separate it out.

And if anything does seem off- whether it's with this story or any other- it doesn't matter what stage we're at- we'll totally do what we can to work around it! The goal is to make a story that everyone can enjoy, and if we can do a better job with that, then we'll happily find a way to!

If you want a summary, Dante just shot Sencarn a quick phonecall to let him know what the deal was with Nehushtan. 6 lines of dialogue, 3 sentences exposition. Not a huge thing.

The Call (Click to Show)


Eyyy thanks for that, really appreciate it, but I'm still wantin' to read that clan war @_@
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Jul 23, 2016 7:18 PM #1455345
ACR target: Joyce Romano (Click to Show)


I'll be honest, I think Light misses the idea of sleeping.
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Jul 23, 2016 8:50 PM #1455358
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ACR target: Joyce Romano (Click to Show)


I'll be honest, I think Light misses the idea of sleeping.


Great work as always and congrats on your first target, now excuse me while I edit the OP with your results.

Update on collab:

No response from Shadowmirror. As much as it pains me, I think we're going to have to skip over him.

@Chromium, I'll be sending you a message with what Devi and I have completed thus far, but I can instead share it with you via google docs if you wish.
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Jul 23, 2016 8:54 PM #1455363
Question: how would you feel about a non-wRHG, non-member being paid an exorbitant amount to assassinate somebody?
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Jul 23, 2016 8:57 PM #1455365
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Question: how would you feel about a non-wRHG, non-member being paid an exorbitant amount to assassinate somebody?


Assassinating one of ours or us assigning you a target?

I believe I have a target or two ready for you for free if you're looking for someone to mutilate.
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Jul 23, 2016 9:35 PM #1455371
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ACR target: Joyce Romano (Click to Show)


I'll be honest, I think Light misses the idea of sleeping.


Good job, devi! :D I enjoyed the read very much.
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Jul 23, 2016 9:38 PM #1455373
No, I'm not looking to kill any of you guys. Yet.
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Jul 23, 2016 9:46 PM #1455375
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No, I'm not looking to kill any of you guys. Yet.


RIP whoever Azure's target in the future is. Hopefully it isn't me. :P
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Jul 23, 2016 9:47 PM #1455376
1v1 me m8
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Jul 23, 2016 9:48 PM #1455377
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No, I'm not looking to kill any of you guys. Yet.


Wonderful news all around.

Plenty of people need to die, just give me a bit of time to get a target ready for ya as I've got other stuff to do atm.
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Jul 23, 2016 9:52 PM #1455379
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1v1 me m8

Lol. I'd like to see this battle.