Woop dee doo, here we go. Its been awhile since I made a battle thread and a battle. Here are our gladiators:
The Spider In The Fog, Leikani Asceum!
The Doctor, David Macbeth!
Hot and Cold
by ErrorBlender
A Time to Save and a Time to Kill
by Alphaeus
Enjoy and please do drop a vote and some CnC. We appreciate the time you give to read our works. Thanks :D
Leikani Asceum (ErrorBlender) VS Doctor David Macbeth (Alphaeus)
Started by: ErrorBlender | Replies: 24 | Views: 3,023
Dec 7, 2016 3:27 PM #1469315
Dec 7, 2016 5:02 PM #1469321
Superb work, EB!
I'm glad I fought you!
My only critique would be that you shifted between tenses a ton, which messed up the flow for me a little.
Otherwise, awesome job!
I'm glad I fought you!
My only critique would be that you shifted between tenses a ton, which messed up the flow for me a little.
Otherwise, awesome job!
Dec 7, 2016 5:18 PM #1469323
I really do like both stories and you both did a great job. But ultimately, I think i'm going to vote for ErrorBlender. Not entirely sure why but something about it seemed better to me. Although I will say Alphaeus's had some pretty parts to it including my favorite with Leikani's Captain Obvious observation skills.
Side question: Was it your intent to have Leikani join/make nice with Nehustan?
Side question: Was it your intent to have Leikani join/make nice with Nehustan?
Dec 8, 2016 3:06 PM #1469475
It was my intent.
She will serve as a spy for The System inside Nehushtan.
She will serve as a spy for The System inside Nehushtan.
Dec 8, 2016 9:39 PM #1469571
Quote from ErrorBlenderIt was my intent.
She will serve as a spy for The System inside Nehushtan.
Haha.
No.
No one spies on Nehushtan. The last person that did ended up as Craze's Living Work.
Aquila will get that reference. Chromy might too. The rest of you will have to wait until I add Vi and Craze to my NPC list (or make them my gladiators).
Dec 8, 2016 9:52 PM #1469581
It's funny, because although Elijah could spy on the coils, even my broken-ass bullshit NPCs can't spy on the entirety of Nehustan.
Dec 8, 2016 10:02 PM #1469588
Dozer might try to spy on Nehushtan but he could easily be stopped with enough false information to make him think they're harmless.
Fountain is spying on Nehushtan. At least the less secure parts of it. Do whatever you want with the spies Alphaeus I don't care.
Decks doesn't even know what Nehushtan is.
Fountain is spying on Nehushtan. At least the less secure parts of it. Do whatever you want with the spies Alphaeus I don't care.
Decks doesn't even know what Nehushtan is.
Dec 8, 2016 10:05 PM #1469589
Quote from UrakoDozer might try to spy on Nehushtan but he could easily be stopped with enough false information to make him think they're harmless.
Meh, yeah.
Because of their influence, you don't have much in the way of records of the negative. Aggressive organizations like The Empire of Sin and the like are pawned off onto The Viktor Group (run by Viktor Gustav, a leading Serpent and potentially my future gladiator) so they would not be connected with Nehushtan directly.
Then again, Dozer is in the know enough to learn about at least certain individuals. I mean, Altaer alone has a heluva reputation. Dante does too, although to a lesser extent.
Dec 9, 2016 3:02 PM #1469712
Quote from AlphaeusAltaer alone has a heluva reputation. Dante does too, although to a lesser extent.
"Dante Rockwell, formerly of Nexcorp and considered highly lethal, with some physical enhancements as well as wide skills."
-Alph v. Codincx
Dec 9, 2016 3:48 PM #1469715
Y U NO VOTE, CHROME?
Anyways, I'm sure both of us would like some CnC. So please throw words that destroy and build at us.
Anyways, I'm sure both of us would like some CnC. So please throw words that destroy and build at us.
Dec 9, 2016 3:54 PM #1469718
Quote from ErrorBlenderY U NO VOTE, CHROME?
Anyways, I'm sure both of us would like some CnC. So please throw words that destroy and build at us.
You very well know my stance on CnC, Error.
Dec 9, 2016 4:12 PM #1469719
Quote from AzureYou very well know my stance on CnC, Error.
Its not just aimed at you though. :)
Dec 9, 2016 4:58 PM #1469722
I really have nothing to say other than well done. Although I suppose you could always CnC each other.
Dec 11, 2016 4:26 AM #1469920
Could we get...idk, some actual attention to this battle?
At least SOMETHING other than two votes??
At least SOMETHING other than two votes??
Dec 11, 2016 4:29 AM #1469921
Quote from AlphaeusCould we get...idk, some actual attention to this battle?
At least SOMETHING other than two votes??
Well at least you got those two votes. In all seriousness, this is a good fight and it's too bad it doesn't have more attention. If I had to guess, i'd say it was all the Christmas events drawing attention away from this fight.